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rubberband
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0 posted 2002-03-11 05:26 PM



This is about my best friend,
Who has been that since Grade Ten.
She moved here in Grade Nine,
To This home town of mine.

She always believed that no one lived here
Only to find out not to fear
That this town is bigger than Spuzzum
And smaller that Maezzum.

Many friends did she meet
And foes (I was one) lost to her in defeat.
If it weren't for French 10 and rugby
I doubt she would be my best buddy.

But this girl, who is merry
I thought once was scary.
She is very funny
And manges to act as "sweet as honey".

One night she took a deathly fall
Three days later her mom gave me a call.
As she talked, it looked like a nightmare.
I started to cry, because it was to much to bare.

We all began to ponder,
Even Turner did wonder,
If she was going to make it,
Or if death would start to nip.

But because she is strong
She made it to our prom.
And this spring, without delay,
Rugby she will play.

I don't know where I would be
If she were not a friend to me.
And I am very glad
That she is my Best Comrade!!!

You are the best John!!!!!!

Luv Tom

Put your past behind you, not you past in front of you!

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Lisa_bebe15
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1 posted 2002-03-11 06:04 PM


thats not really a poem I think..But its still really good..you got ur point across very well..good write!

"Water Over Matter"

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2 posted 2002-03-11 06:16 PM


Oh it's a poem... Isn't it called a limmrick or something like that? Thank you Tom, mucho appreciated! Definately saving this one!

Love John

I want to die peacefully, in my sleep, like my grandfather, not screaming, terrified, like his passengers.

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3 posted 2002-03-11 06:49 PM


This is a wonderful poem although I do wonder how it could be anything else. Anyway thank you for sharing these beautiful words with us

Andrew

"The pin didn't drop it came and crashed down"

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4 posted 2002-03-11 09:57 PM


She was talking about me, you know Andrew. Cause it's Amers. She's Tom. And I'm John. Confused yet? I know I am. Thanks again Blake!

I want to die peacefully, in my sleep, like my grandfather, not screaming, terrified, like his passengers.

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5 posted 2002-03-12 09:20 AM


Yeah I knew

"The pin didn't drop it came and crashed down"

rubberband
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6 posted 2002-03-12 02:12 PM


I am glad you like it.  But tell me what is "poem".  I thought there was many forms.  Unless you are thinking of "comrade".  some people don't purnouce the "e".  

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7 posted 2002-03-12 03:37 PM


I don't pronounce the 'e'... GET BACK TO YOUR SCHOOL WORK!!!!

I want to die peacefully, in my sleep, like my grandfather, not screaming, terrified, like his passengers.

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