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Teen Poetry #5

Dance Floor...

Ceinwyn
Member Elite

since 2000-07-09

Posts 2175
VA

0 posted 2002-03-11 04:25 PM

Intoxicated
By the atmposhere
Please pass me another one
On the dance floor
Flirting with
The strobe light
Crowd merging
Into oblivion
Lost in my own feeling
Body is numb
From tantalizing notes
Bouncing off the walls
Making its way
To my soul...

Lisa_bebe15
Member

since 2001-11-15

Posts 151
Florida

1 posted 2002-03-11 05:59 PM

wow..thats good..i wonder what u wanted another one of..lol..

"Water Over Matter"

Skyfire

Member Elite

since 2000-12-27

Posts 3381
Riding

2 posted 2002-03-11 06:32 PM

Oh I like this!

I want to die peacefully, in my sleep, like my grandfather, not screaming, terrified, like his passengers.

LCBS
Senior Member

since 2001-11-29

Posts 532
Connecticut

3 posted 2002-03-11 08:09 PM

Hey Kris, I love music, I feel it relfects our souls, so I get a different perspective of this poem...and its good!

~Lisa

Cinderelly
Member

since 2001-12-31

Posts 189
NM, USA

4 posted 2002-03-11 09:13 PM

This is a really good poem . . .

Life is a moderately good play w/ a badly written thrid act. - Unknown

Carly Maas
Junior Member

since 2000-04-21

Posts 23
Garden City, MI, USA

5 posted 2002-03-12 07:57 PM

I love dancing and music too. And this poem describes it so well. Nice writing!

"One day you'll love me as I onced loved you,
one day you'll cry over me, as I once cried over
you, and one day you'll want me but I won't want you.

cherish
Senior Member

since 2001-03-25

Posts 1639
swimming in fairy floss...........

6 posted 2002-03-13 04:27 AM

WOooooOOoo! sounds like someones been out partyin' all night long

...dancing is so much fun, esp' when you have no rules!

Zombie

Torn are her limbs
By quiet hands that
Tug life(color) out of her.
Gnawing edges round
Into a broken(satisfying)
Shadow

PoetryIsLife

Senior Member

since 2001-10-27

Posts 1763
...in my boxers...

7 posted 2002-03-14 04:29 AM

LOVE IT!
LOVE IT!
LOVE IT!

Kristen, what a picture. With my love of music and dancing.... I could see it in my mind's eye. Lovely write here.

~ Titus

Will I ever forget what happened today?

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