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0 posted 2002-03-10 01:11 PM



Black Roses

Surrounded by black roses
Withered from a weary existence
Once vibrant, once comforting
Now emotionless, passionless
Lost in a world of deliberate agony
Surrounded by black roses
Lacking elegance it once held
Modernized to a world of destruction
Heartless and numb, somber and suffering
Lost in a world of deliberate torment
Surrounded by black roses

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1 posted 2002-03-10 01:42 PM


I liked this one... i like black roses too...

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2 posted 2002-03-10 05:36 PM


I actually don't care for roses at all...but the poem is very good
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3 posted 2002-03-10 08:35 PM


I love the way you did this!

I want to die peacefully, in my sleep, like my grandfather, not screaming, terrified, like his passengers.

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4 posted 2002-03-10 08:44 PM


Marvellous! Black roses are my favourite of all flowers so you've definitely got a fan of this piece here.
The representation of a withered life through the roses is well done, Lisa. I like the images I'm getting out of this and the way it reads is just amazing.

Thanks for sharing this. Much enjoyed.

~AF~

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5 posted 2002-03-10 11:23 PM


Morbid and dark!! oooooOOooOOoO i Liked it!!!

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