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xEmperorEmber
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0 posted 2002-03-07 09:03 PM


Bitter fiend
driven cold with a shaken stir
all that life can give you
take it in with a single breath
all those who have forgave you
and yet who stands beside you now?
Forgiveness forgranted
forged and left blank
forsake your own morality for a piece
of the temporary
forsake yourself for a glimpse of
infinity
sell yourself for the inpiration of
divinity
disown your mind for a chance of to feel
eternity
and all the while sense this growing insecurity
and who do you gain forgiveness from now
when all to blame can stare back through glass
when all youve done plays you the victim and wont pass
when all you need dances on a stage out of your grasp
displaying your deaf irony to the music of the tragedies
you wish you could have
fleeting inspiration
desperation to grip time like a mad man
clinch it in desolate dissonant beauty
make the time to find yourself again
through this maze of most delicate china
that you weave this world from
begging to maneuver through and out like a saint
its in this graven image of ice that you carve your gods
desolate crusader of winter
for who do you fight for
and for what will you die for
and how can you claim allegiance
when you know your self no more
than that of a stranger
maybe its time to ask
for who do you carry this baggage for?
in all your struggle,
still nothing more than what we see you to be
dispite your infinate infinity
nothing more than what we can see you to be
and that is the first note
to the song of true ultimate irony


...With my feet up on the ground i lose myself between the sounds and open wide to suck it in i feel it move across my skin....

© Copyright 2002 Jimi Hendrix - All Rights Reserved
LCBS
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1 posted 2002-03-07 09:13 PM


Im glad I "just read" it was an awesome poem!  Great Write!!!!!!


~lisa

xEmperorEmber
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2 posted 2002-03-07 10:01 PM


Thank you, the title was derived simply because i am to lazy to thing of something flashy  for the attention of it.. lol. .i am glad you took it light heartedly, i hope it doesnt offend. Thank you for enjoying what i have given.
Dark Enchantress
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3 posted 2002-03-08 02:35 PM


Funny, I was just thinking about you not too long ago and here you are. Actually I wrote a poem about you, which I was fairly pleased with only to have someone else tell me it sucks. Don't you hate it when that happens? Anywho... I'm glad to see something from you again. AND YOU OWE ME A LETTER! You thought I forgot didn't you... didn't you! Wow, look at me taking up all this precious space. Back to the point... I really, really, really liked it. I'm too lazy to tell you why or to try and analyze anything for you but just take my word for it. You know how rude I am... if it sucked I'd tell you. I'll talk to you whenever.

Love,
Me

-- the calm before the storm --

La vie est plus belle quand on l'ecrit soi-meme.

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xEmperorEmber
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4 posted 2002-03-08 03:51 PM


JAMSTERS! Thanks.. I know i owe you ... i have always owed you a letter. Nice seeing you again bwahahah. I hope i can write other things you can appreciate.
Dark Enchantress
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5 posted 2002-03-08 04:25 PM


Paul you rule.


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6 posted 2002-03-10 11:35 PM


Great piece!! Keep em coming!

iTs bEeN 1 Of ThOsE dAyZ 4 2 MaNY dAyZ nOw..I jUst NeEd a DaY whErE tHe WOrLd cAn tAkE cArE of ItsElf..

xEmperorEmber
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7 posted 2002-03-11 11:54 AM


Thank you all.
cherish
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since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639
swimming in fairy floss...........
8 posted 2002-03-13 04:58 AM


forsake yourself for a glimpse of
infinity
sell yourself for the inpiration of
divinity
disown your mind for a chance of to feel
eternity


AMEN!!! *bows* im not stalking you or anything...but youre a friend of jaimies!...haha i KNEW there was something awesome about you
again, a VERY VERY good piece here...im fast becoming a fan of your writing....post MORE damnit!

Zombie

Torn are her limbs
By quiet hands that
Tug life(color) out of her.
Gnawing edges round
Into a broken(satisfying)
Shadow

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