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GOlDsparklESS
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since 2001-12-13

Posts 428
central nj

0 posted 2002-03-05 07:05 PM

you are ridiculous
an arrogant fool, and pretentiously cocky
you're odorous ( smells like funk )
and your smile is not that charming
( glad i saw the light)
your obsession with yourself is just a manifestation of your cowardice
you're afraid they'll find out your shining armor is just aluminum foil
fake as hell
just like you

Ceinwyn
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since 2000-07-09

Posts 2175
VA

1 posted 2002-03-05 07:09 PM

Ha! I'm soooo feeling that right now..weird how I was about to write this really cruel poem about this guy, and you so hit a nerve there with the shining armour bit!!!! Loved it!!

Kristen

LCBS
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since 2001-11-29

Posts 532
Connecticut

2 posted 2002-03-05 07:24 PM

that sums up every boy at my school....every single boy....hahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahaha...I'm laughing at our misfortune....I've had a bad day and I think that your poem expressed it very well

~LCBS

xShUgArHiGhx

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since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

3 posted 2002-03-05 11:30 PM

Whoa!!! This was powerful stuff! Awesome poem!

iTs bEeN 1 Of ThOsE dAyZ 4 2 MaNY dAyZ nOw..I jUst NeEd a DaY whErE tHe WOrLd cAn tAkE cArE of ItsElf..

Zukene_Chic
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since 2001-09-26

Posts 152
Cali

4 posted 2002-03-05 11:57 PM

wow... angry stuff. Very well written, though. Lots of passion. I like that.

Erin
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since 2000-06-15

Posts 2527
~Chicago~

5 posted 2002-03-06 05:13 AM

WOW!!! Sounds like someone really hurt you...But sounds like alot of people I know...Great piece!!!

~I thought it was only your loss when we broke up, but it turns out it was mine too~

EagleScorpion
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since 2000-03-08

Posts 1644
Here, Now, Forever

6 posted 2002-03-20 12:24 PM

now this one is about a guy that I know. (and, yes, he smells like funk)
Manisha manisha manisha, now hes not all that bad!!! cmon! give the smelly man a break

God alone is alone. Man is not.

cherish
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since 2001-03-25

Posts 1639
swimming in fairy floss...........

7 posted 2002-03-20 12:35 PM

ooooooooh i liked that part that went "(smells like funk)" a lot. this is a great poem from you mani...im going to look forward to reading more from you

btw..are you indian?

My england is goodly- are you strudable?

GOlDsparklESS
Member

since 2001-12-13

Posts 428
central nj

8 posted 2002-08-30 02:12 AM

hey there- I wrote this poem a long time ago. however, thanks to everybody that responded. and yes, I am Indian.

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