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Master
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0 posted 2002-03-05 01:38 PM



The cigarette butts of Marlboro Lights
in the sky,-- the silhouette of Orion, --
just another shoulder to cry on.
Thus, I’m enduring cold nights.
It’s two months since you’ve left me. Since
the weather turned cold. Since the sunrise
last caressed the horizon
with warmth. At least, so it seems.
Weaving the spider-webs of constellations,
the muse of astronomy catches my gaze.
Drifting off into space,
I am losing my patience.
People say that the cosmos is vast,--
but there’s nowhere to hide my sorrow
when the moon, like a bookmark, sticks out of
the time that’s long passed…

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1 posted 2002-03-05 02:43 PM


I can relate, good poem. love Clare

Life is about change,sometimes its painful,sometimes its beautiful,sometimes its both.

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2 posted 2002-03-05 07:48 PM


aww man, i havent checked in on you in a while master, guess she got away

well...it certainly makes for some of your best stuff

love the last line
peace

-Queth-
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3 posted 2002-03-05 10:29 PM


-Master-

This is an incredible read. Simply charming! Thanks for sharing this!


Q.u.e.t.h.

Everything in between...

[This message has been edited by -Queth- (03-05-2002 10:32 PM).]

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4 posted 2002-03-05 11:25 PM


Heyy master! havent seen you around here in a while. Great piece and hope to see more from you

iTs bEeN 1 Of ThOsE dAyZ 4 2 MaNY dAyZ nOw..I jUst NeEd a DaY whErE tHe WOrLd cAn tAkE cArE of ItsElf..

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5 posted 2002-03-09 01:28 PM


As per usual, excellent write, Master. I haven't read something of yours in such a long time that it's refreshing to see your face around here again.

People say that the cosmos is vast,--
but there’s nowhere to hide my sorrow

I could relate to those lines very well. The incorporation of Gods into the poem falls nothing short of brilliant. You always do that and it always scores high in my books.

I enjoyed the read quite a bit. Can't wait to see some more.

~AF~

::Most people never listen::
Ernest Hemingway

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6 posted 2002-03-09 02:04 PM


I really liked this.
Sad really...but quite decent in how it was written.
Kudos to you..great to read


jenn

"You are the strength, that keeps me walking- you are the hope that keeps me trusting."

LCBS
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7 posted 2002-03-09 02:24 PM


Excellent write, a lot of deep hidden meaning that must be uncovered with careful reading...I liked it a lot...Thanks for the read!

~Lisa

[This message has been edited by LCBS (03-09-2002 02:29 PM).]

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8 posted 2002-03-09 02:32 PM


Amazing
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