Teen Poetry #5 |
Never Looking Back |
DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
I don't really like this, but its something different and i needed to get it off my chest -=Never Looking Back=- Fly away from here on silver laced dreams leaving every and all to never glance back eyes curved forward in seek of my new life weighed-down far to long Breaking free of these chains that pull at my soul crying inside.. remaining unheard no one to listen only a deafening pause of continued silence To all those who have torn me apart.. continue no longer I am pressing forward in my own self-right forgetting all that mattered Kiss goodbye to my love held loosely by fingertips traveling this journey to let go forever **You can't always trust the people you want to** |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
Awsome piece it is full or strong emotions and I really love it.It's been awhile since I've read a post from you and I can't wait to read more.Since we never talk anymore. Lauren |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
DQ~ WOW!!! Great work here girl!!! You must be one strong hearted girl...Pouring out your emotions letting everyone know...Cant wait to see more of your work!!! ~I thought it was only your loss when we broke up, but it turns out it was mine too~ |
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HiddenSparklez Member
since 2000-12-29
Posts 190British Columbia, Canada |
Great words and they flowed really well... I don't understand why you wouldn't like this one... I think your poems keep getting better... in the terms that it sounds like you're learning to overcome the obstacles in your life. Good for you! Keep writing! "You do what you do, you say what you say, you try to be everything to everyone... come on now, do that stupid dance for me" -Everclear |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
This was a great poem Kiley. You poured your emotions out...::hugs:: I know exactly how you feel. You did a great job on this..keep em coming! iTs bEeN 1 Of ThOsE dAyZ 4 2 MaNY dAyZ nOw..I jUst NeEd a DaY whErE tHe WOrLd cAn tAkE cArE of ItsElf.. |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
I loved it!! hrm..I really don't know what else to say..I do look forward to more Kristen |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
that was really beautiful Kiles your writing has definitely grown I see so much heart in it and just wish I could write that way thanks for sharing hope to talk to you again là où est mon amour? |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
Great Work! You are a wonderful writer, keep up the great work! Melanie! You can't hurt me anymore than I have hurt myself already... |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Hey there, Kiley. It's been ages since I've read a piece from you and wow, it's changed so much! You've become really professional in your wording which is great to see. It means you've grown as a writer. The peace was beautifully written with just the right amount of sentimental value. Well done and thank you for sharing this. ~AF~ ::Most people never listen:: |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
Wow, I haven't been around alot, but this is probably one of my favorite's from you. I don't know why you didn't like it but it really was good. Jon "Only God can judge me" Tupac Shakur |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
thanks everyone **You can't always trust the people you want to** |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
"I am pressing forward in my own self-right forgetting all that mattered Kiss goodbye to my love held loosely by fingertips traveling this journey to let go forever" I have to agree you have grown as a writer. ...think you did an beautiful job on this piece. Wowish, Kiley. ^_^ "Dont piss me off, Im runing out of places to hide the bodies." [This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (03-18-2002 10:53 PM).] |
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