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DancinQueen
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0 posted 2002-03-04 11:59 PM


I don't really like this, but its something different and i needed to get it off my chest

-=Never Looking Back=-

Fly away from here
on silver laced dreams
leaving every and all
to never glance back
eyes curved forward
in seek of my new life
weighed-down far to long
Breaking free of these chains
that pull at my soul
crying inside..
remaining unheard
no one to listen
only a deafening pause
of continued silence
To all those who have
torn me apart..
continue no longer
I am pressing forward
in my own self-right
forgetting all that mattered
Kiss goodbye to my love
held loosely by fingertips
traveling this journey
to let go forever

**You can't always trust the people you want to**

© Copyright 2002 Kiley - All Rights Reserved
TopGunLauren
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1 posted 2002-03-05 01:09 AM


Awsome piece it is full or strong emotions and I really love it.It's been awhile since I've read a post from you and I can't wait to read more.Since we never talk anymore.
  Lauren

Erin
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2 posted 2002-03-05 01:14 AM


DQ~
WOW!!! Great work here girl!!! You must be one strong hearted girl...Pouring out your emotions letting everyone know...Cant wait to see more of your work!!!

~I thought it was only your loss when we broke up, but it turns out it was mine too~

HiddenSparklez
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3 posted 2002-03-05 02:37 AM


Great words and they flowed really well... I don't understand why you wouldn't like this one... I think your poems keep getting better... in the terms that it sounds like you're learning to overcome the obstacles in your life. Good for you! Keep writing!

"You do what you do, you say what you say, you try to be everything to everyone... come on now, do that stupid dance for me" -Everclear

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4 posted 2002-03-05 05:06 PM


This was a great poem Kiley. You poured your emotions out...::hugs:: I know exactly how you feel. You did a great job on this..keep em coming!

iTs bEeN 1 Of ThOsE dAyZ 4 2 MaNY dAyZ nOw..I jUst NeEd a DaY whErE tHe WOrLd cAn tAkE cArE of ItsElf..

Ceinwyn
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5 posted 2002-03-05 06:33 PM


I loved it!! hrm..I really don't know what else to say..I do look forward to more

Kristen

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6 posted 2002-03-05 08:29 PM


that was really beautiful Kiles
your writing has definitely grown
I see so much heart in it and just wish I could write that way
thanks for sharing
hope to talk to you again

là où est mon amour?
donde está mi amour?
wo ist meine Liebe?
Nelly Furtado é a menina a mais bonita no mundo largo do todo.


Melster
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7 posted 2002-03-07 09:45 PM


Great Work!  You are a wonderful writer, keep up the great work!

Melanie!

You can't hurt me anymore than I have hurt myself already...

anonymousfemale
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8 posted 2002-03-09 01:09 PM


Hey there, Kiley.

It's been ages since I've read a piece from you and wow, it's changed so much! You've become really professional in your wording which is great to see. It means you've grown as a writer.

The peace was beautifully written with just the right amount of sentimental value. Well done and thank you for sharing this.

~AF~

::Most people never listen::
Ernest Hemingway

keoni
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9 posted 2002-03-09 11:46 PM


Wow, I haven't been around alot, but this is probably one of my favorite's from you. I don't know why you didn't like it but it really was good.
Jon

"Only God can judge me" Tupac Shakur
"Sometimes it takes a painful loss to realize you are free"- Bouncing Souls

DancinQueen
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10 posted 2002-03-10 06:07 PM


thanks everyone

**You can't always trust the people you want to**

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11 posted 2002-03-18 10:52 PM


"I am pressing forward
in my own self-right
forgetting all that mattered
Kiss goodbye to my love
held loosely by fingertips
traveling this journey
to let go forever" I have to agree you have grown as a writer.

...think you did an beautiful job on this piece. Wowish, Kiley. ^_^

"Dont piss me off, Im runing out of places to hide the bodies."

[This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (03-18-2002 10:53 PM).]

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