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Android 17
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
Scope- As you walk down the street, You keenly catch my eye. With destiny twisting our fates, And the future of you and I. I watch your every step, Every breath you take. Popular ammoung others... I make no mistake. Gazing at you, I wonder... "Are you the object of desire?" My infatutation with you, As bad a murder for hire. As I ready myself for the moment, On making my next move. I ready the shakiness of my hands... Your elegance is so smooth. Some might call it love... It's just my occupation. Nobody can quite describe, This strange situation. In the time which is now, It couldn't be riper! You can't love me back, For I am a sniper! Others are too in love with the sound of their own voice to speak the truth... |
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-Queth- Junior Member
since 2002-02-10
Posts 35Canada |
So you're an assassin, eh? Might-darn freaky. -grin- I'd have to say, though, this was nicely done, and it had quite the clever ending. Too bad the infatuation couldn't have worked. Hehe. Till your next poem! Q.u.e.t.h. Everything in between... |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Oooo mysterious and suspenseful!! i liked it a lot!! iTs bEeN 1 Of ThOsE dAyZ 4 2 MaNY dAyZ nOw..I jUst NeEd a DaY whErE tHe WOrLd cAn tAkE cArE of ItsElf.. |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
I am in luck, I found a poem by you to reply to  I really enjoyed it..and I do look forward to more..Kristen |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Typically great, Alex. Typically great! (<>..<>) |
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Android 17
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
Teh-heh...I like fooling people! I was hoping to get into a plot twist thingy!!! And thanks Queth---and I AM an assassin...okay, I'm going to Harvard to sniper training...but hey, I'm still trying right? Thanks for checking out my work!!! And yeah---it's typical! Ain't it? Others are too in love with the sound of their own voice to speak the truth... |
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PoetryIsLife
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
Alex- I love the storyline, with "Scope" and "Sniper".... wonderful idea, mate. Really, it's quite origonal.And I enjoyed the flow, and length of the poem. Splendid ending. Pukka! Glad to see another one from you....~ Titus The One, The Only... The Titus. |
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babygurl * Junior Member
since 2001-12-07
Posts 30 |
great poem alex.. i liked it alot... call me damn you!! lol |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
hmmmmmmmm....you know ive read it  nicely done kid  , you should really think about making serials or something of that sort. this poem was outstanding, i enjoyed it the first time i read it and ive enjoyed reading it and the replies to it again youre a great poet, i love the stories you create alex, post MORE buddy..NOW! Zombie |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Great work!!! You fooled me in the first half. I honestly thought this was about someone you like! ~I thought it was only your loss when we broke up, but it turns out it was mine too~ |
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Android 17
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
Hehe...thanks y'all! ^_^ I think I'll write a little more! I also have a poem which I haven't posted yet---I wrote it like two months ago! I was depressed (no kidding) and wrote a poem called, "The Last Paragraph" And I was trying to get it to sound like a love poem at first! Lol, glad I fooled y'all! Others are too in love with the sound of their own voice to speak the truth... |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
Very interesting idea for a poem. It turned out very well. I didn't know the poem was going the way it did until I reached the end. Good job Jon "Only God can judge me" Tupac Shakur |
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Android 18 Member
since 2002-02-20
Posts 61Austrailia (My DreamLand) |
Hey Alex!! Great poem, like everyone before me says, very mysteriousn and suspenseful. I like it! ~*~Serena~*~ |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Intersting, Alex. I didn't care for the topic very much but at least you got a rhyme scheme the way it's meant to read.   Snipers rock by the way.  Sorry, I'm tired and this reply is really crappy. *sigh*Well thanks for posting it. ~AF~ ::Most people never listen:: |
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