Him - pipTalk Forums

How to Join	Member's Area	Private Library	Search	Sanctuary		Login
Main Forums	Discussion	Tech Talk	Mature Content	Archives	A home without a wall, Our haven without ends, A circle we all call Our Family of Friends!

Jenn Cirrincione

Member Elite

since 2000-07-02

Posts 2107
Fl

0 posted 2002-02-27 08:48 AM

Nearly twenty years
and still no idea
the sun rises each day
and disappears in the dark
but that's all I knew
for certain
-until him-
Now the whole world
begins to make sense
and I know what I'm here for
and I know where to go.
His beauty expressed
in every flower that opens-
and in the rain that comes down
in the summer.
The love in my heart,
always blooms greater
with the end of each day
when the sun
disappears
in
the
dark.

Afterthought: Well I realize this is a bit ambiguous in meaning but where would the fun be if I told you what I wrote it about. Tell me what you got from it.

[This message has been edited by Jenn Cirrincione (02-27-2002 08:49 AM).]

hopeful
Junior Member

since 2000-04-19

Posts 27

1 posted 2002-02-27 08:26 PM

I like this poem. very well written. I like how it is open to many different views for people to see it in. It could be seen in a way of talking about a boyfriend, or even just a friend, maybe a long lost loved one. depending on how people wanted to view it. keep up the good work.

"Be careful who you fall for there never who you think they are"

If you have any suggestions on how to make my peom better it is very welcomed.

cherish
Senior Member

since 2001-03-25

Posts 1639
swimming in fairy floss...........

2 posted 2002-02-28 04:04 AM

i dunno..as soon as i saw the title i thought that this poem belonged in Spiritual, you write this as though youre talking about god, but then again it DOES seem like youre talking about a guy. you COULD be equating this guy with "godliness"...thats MY safest bet

good poem jenn...its nice seeing you happy

Zombie

Torn are her limbs
By quiet hands that
Tug life(color) out of her.
Gnawing edges round
Into a broken(satisfying)
Shadow

Marshalzu

Member Elite

since 2001-02-15

Posts 2681
Lurking

3 posted 2002-02-28 06:21 AM

Great poem Jenn, thank you for sharing it with us. I thought you were talking about a guy but I can see how it could be god or whatever. A very nice read

See this through and leave my friend, the tears will come and I will end.

Jenn Cirrincione

Member Elite

since 2000-07-02

Posts 2107
Fl

4 posted 2002-02-28 11:47 PM

I wrote this with regards to my boyfriend...but somehow everything I write about him seems religious after I put it to paper. Like...I guess thats a good thing...

hehe

thanks for the replies....

love you guys

jenn

"You are the strength, that keeps me walking- you are the hope that keeps me trusting."

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

5 posted 2002-03-03 10:44 PM

Sometimes we meet people who can bring a whole new meaning and direction to our life

Learn from these people!! Great piece!! Keep em coming!

iTs bEeN 1 Of ThOsE dAyZ 4 2 MaNY dAyZ nOw..I jUst NeEd a DaY whErE tHe WOrLd cAn tAkE cArE of ItsElf..

anonymousfemale
Member Elite

since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

6 posted 2002-03-04 07:59 AM

EwwWWwwwWWWwww....love...

Nah just kidding, Jenndaline. 'tis a sweet piece and you should show this to your Mister Man. He'd be flattered...or if you're not with him, he might charge you with stalking and get a restraining order out against you.

There are some really nice images in here and the symbolism rocks.

Very nicely done. Be proud.

~AF~

::Most people never listen::
Ernest Hemingway

keoni
Senior Member

since 2000-10-16

Posts 850
Up in the mountains in the NFC

7 posted 2002-03-05 12:54 PM

This one could definately be taken either way. But either way I liked it. I would write more but I have to go
Jon

"Only God can judge me" Tupac Shakur
"Sometimes it takes a painful loss to realize you are free"- Bouncing Souls

	⇧ top of page ⇧
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.