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xerxes
Junior Member

since 2001-08-05

Posts 34

0 posted 2002-02-26 09:15 PM

Fell behind
Losing time
All tangled webs become difficult to unwind
Though I’m tarnished and unkind
Hard to find
You loved me
Through Misery, Greed, Jealousy
Regret owns no happy ending
Feelings lovely, words hatefully
Painfully
Destroying me
Where did I go?
My reflection unknown
Smiles grown cold
All the things I never told
Acting bold
Wrong decisions I chose
Punishment, I suppose
For the soul I sold
The smoke I blow
These words I throw.
-Xerxes

[This message has been edited by xerxes (02-27-2002 03:31 AM).]

cherish
Senior Member

since 2001-03-25

Posts 1639
swimming in fairy floss...........

1 posted 2002-02-28 03:31 AM

i liked this very much, it was a rather sad sort of poem, but it had a very good flow to it. nicely written

Zombie

Torn are her limbs
By quiet hands that
Tug life(color) out of her.
Gnawing edges round
Into a broken(satisfying)
Shadow

anonymousfemale
Member Elite

since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

2 posted 2002-03-10 07:58 AM

Regret owns no happy ending

That it doesn't. Although the pieces theme is rather unhappy, the way you've written it is certainly unique. This would make a wonderful long Eulogy but for now, the shorter version in the form of a poem works for it.

Interesting ideas lurking in those lines. Some I can feel have an undercurrent that would make a fun exercise to decipher. Until I get that bored, I'll have to sit here knowing that you've written an extremely deep and profound piece.

Thank you for sharing.

~AF~

"Sometimes the only way to stay sane is to go a little crazy." - Susanna Kaysen

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

3 posted 2002-03-10 11:49 AM

"Though I’m tarnished and unkind
Hard to find
You loved me
Through Misery, Greed, Jealousy"

this part was really well done, it is what spoke the loudest to me.....a great write

LCBS
Senior Member

since 2001-11-29

Posts 532
Connecticut

4 posted 2002-03-10 01:20 PM

"All tangled webs become difficult to unwind"

Sometimes I feel this way...other times I feel it is not only difficult, but impossible, you did a great job expressing thought and ideas, and I especially liked the title

~lisa

Words_of_Glitter
Member

since 2000-10-25

Posts 90
USA

5 posted 2002-03-10 06:32 PM

That was just the greatest thing ever possibly...well, I really did enjoy it and I think it makes people realize that they should just do whatever it is they want and whatever makes them happy.

You miss 100% of the shots you don't take

If you don't look at it as a basketball quote, it is good for life too!

"Time really does fly by and no one knows where it goes, so if you have something to say or do, say or do it now."

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

6 posted 2002-03-10 11:02 PM

The words you used flowed nicely....i enjoyed this a lot. Keep em coming

iTs bEeN 1 Of ThOsE dAyZ 4 2 MaNY dAyZ nOw..I jUst NeEd a DaY whErE tHe WOrLd cAn tAkE cArE of ItsElf..

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