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Child of the Stars
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0 posted 2002-02-26 03:23 PM


Hola I had to write this for class, it's an accurate portrayal of my evil Writer's Block...msn me if you need\want an explanation, cuz this is packed with personal symbolism. *points to the envelope above* I miss all of you, especially the oldies...lots of hugs to you especially. PIP sure is changing, and it's kinda neat gazing from the outside...


In a Glass of Orange Juice


sailing through the groves abloom
i wonder if that's me up there
rolling upward to a room,
a faintful tower, bellmen's flare

never stopped the hurling bows
while ever wanted me to play
and play my cello's overflow, i've done

oratory sense abashed
when i'm relaxed above the stair
hovered once, i'll someday crash
for wrenches broke from lack of pears

heaving, wheezing, almost there
a number twice revealing me;
I pray my cello's playing "Thirty-Three"

© Copyright 2002 Carly Anne Van Dort - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2002-02-26 09:45 PM


always a pleasure reading from you love. *peck* even if it is rare now a days. miss you and i miss your work carly. keep writtin hun. love you so much. *snuffle*
tiff

“A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.”

I know Im not perfect but I can smile
& I hope that you c this heart behind my tired eyes

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2 posted 2002-02-28 04:08 AM


caaaaaaaaarrrrrl-eeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeey!

again, so many words, so little of which i understand ...i liked reading it, perhaps someday i'd figure out what it is that makes you tick, but until that day i dont think i would be able to figure out what this poem is about ...keep posting more often!

Zombie

Torn are her limbs
By quiet hands that
Tug life(color) out of her.
Gnawing edges round
Into a broken(satisfying)
Shadow

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3 posted 2002-02-28 06:08 AM


Carly, Carly, Carly. What a wonderful poem as usual you astound me with the beauty of the words, this is a wonderful peice and thank you for sharing it with us

See this through and leave my friend, the tears will come and I will end.

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4 posted 2002-03-01 07:08 PM


Carly!

I loved it. I can see now why the oldies loved your work, and you. Splendid job here. I, btw, am (the) Titus, the One and Only, lover of the "Titus Dance." HaHaHa! I'm mostly harmless, don't worry...

sailing through the groves abloom
i wonder if that's me up there
rolling upward to a room,
a faintful tower, bellmen's flare

What wonderful imagery and symbolsim you've got! Wicked!

~ Titus


The One, The Only... The Titus.

[This message has been edited by PoetryIsLife (03-01-2002 07:09 PM).]

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5 posted 2002-03-07 06:43 PM


Bump

You have been bitten by the Zu bug

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6 posted 2002-03-08 10:06 AM


Hehehe...I'm sitting here---looking like an idiot..with a smile on my face...because I have no idea what this poem means!

Lol, it's sorta got a cooky...out of this world thingy to it! I'm...at a loss of words! Lol, sorry Carley!

Others are too in love with the sound of their own voice to speak the truth...

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7 posted 2002-03-09 12:04 PM


'ello Carlita!

I'm getting a different meaning out of this that I won't share here. I know you won't have written about this particular subject. There are some beautiful lines in there with vivid imagery. I'd like to say I know what it's about but to be perfectly honest, I don't. It does read well though with a very mystical sense.

Well done. Be proud for you have confused the hell out of all of us.

~AF~

::Most people never listen::
Ernest Hemingway

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8 posted 2002-03-09 04:30 PM


Yep, you all figured me out I live for the sole purpose of confusion! mwa ha ha

"Hey! The oven's on!"
"Kari! The oven's on!"
"I know, Jim!  I'm baking something!"

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9 posted 2002-03-09 11:43 PM


The words went together beautifully, but the meaning escaped me. Sorry, it sounded awesome, but for some reason I drew a blank
Jon

"Only God can judge me" Tupac Shakur
"Sometimes it takes a painful loss to realize you are free"- Bouncing Souls

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10 posted 2002-03-18 10:46 PM


Okay? Say what? o_O; HaHa as always...its been a pleasant reading;

"heaving, wheezing, almost there
a number twice revealing me;
I pray my cello's playing "Thirty-Three" lol I liked it...interesting piece, interesting title.

"Dont piss me off, Im runing out of places to hide the bodies."

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11 posted 2002-03-18 10:53 PM


Back from the dead!

~ Titus

My motto... always changing, always improving, living life in veiw of eternity.

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12 posted 2002-03-19 08:31 PM


amazing.

best piece i've read in a while.

wow.

/gwen/

so foul and fair a day i have not seen.  - macbeth act 1, scene 3

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