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laconic
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since 2002-02-17
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0 posted 2002-02-26 07:26 AM



I sit and think of days gone by
how i never stopped to wonder why
took for granted that i was alive

but now i see...

i was once blind to my environment
defiled all yet didnt repent
never understood how to be a true friend

but now i see...

mistreated others for my own purposes
didnt care when they said "that hurts"
stood on anyone just to be first

but now i see...

that i'm not changed at all
it's just that
now i see where i've done poor

so i see...

all the things you require of me
to change my ways for brighter days
to begin to obey...my God today

my inspiration has drained like perspiration ..again i'm empty like hemp i been smoked dry...*sigh*

© Copyright 2002 Luke Zhang - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2002-02-26 11:34 AM


Im glad that you can see and accept your faults..its an important and strong thing to do... Great poem hun

iTs bEeN 1 Of ThOsE dAyZ 4 2 MaNY dAyZ nOw..I jUst NeEd a DaY whErE tHe WOrLd cAn tAkE cArE of ItsElf..

LCBS
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2 posted 2002-02-26 03:06 PM


Great job, Im glad you have realized your faults and worked to better yourself...

~LCBS

Exeryone makes mistake, learn from them and move on, because tomorrow we'll make more...

cherish
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swimming in fairy floss...........
3 posted 2002-02-28 04:29 AM


its great knowing where youve gone wrong...all the better for when youre trying to improve yourself.. nice write

Zombie

Torn are her limbs
By quiet hands that
Tug life(color) out of her.
Gnawing edges round
Into a broken(satisfying)
Shadow

laconic
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4 posted 2002-02-28 05:24 AM


thank you, thank you and thank you.... have u taken a liking to me cherish
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5 posted 2002-03-03 10:47 PM


i like this one a lot so im bumping it up for all to see

iTs bEeN 1 Of ThOsE dAyZ 4 2 MaNY dAyZ nOw..I jUst NeEd a DaY whErE tHe WOrLd cAn tAkE cArE of ItsElf..

laconic
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6 posted 2002-03-04 06:42 AM


thanks i feel so complimented
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