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Kosetsu
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since 2001-03-10
Posts 450
Alabama, USA

0 posted 2002-02-25 10:46 PM



Huddled in the graveyards of his own mental world,
A little boy stands with tears streaming down in rivulets
Through the non-existent mask of chains that
Hides him from the insanity of the pers’nal threats

That he flings at himself with every passing hour
Of the icy forlorn night that’s locked away his stars
In torturous cages of confinement and pain
And tempts him to paint himself in bloody scars.

He grips his head in tremb’ling hands, screaming to the sky
Words that wrack his hollow shell of a body
And force him down on broken knees,
“What will it take for you to understand me?!”

Answered by the stone dead faces of fam’ly and friends,
He pulls himself back onto his feet,
Shaking under the weight of all the tension forced
Down his throat like pieces of vile rotten meat.

Surrounded by the shrieking graves of mem’ries long forgotten
And tormented by the remembrances they call for and demand,
He clenches shut his tear-filled eyes, and whispers,
“Why can’t you understand...?”

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Inspired by some of Gracianna's poetry.

-Adam

"If life is so significant, then why do we die?"

© Copyright 2002 Adam Kamerer - All Rights Reserved
LCBS
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since 2001-11-29
Posts 532
Connecticut
1 posted 2002-02-25 10:52 PM


Im so honored to be the first to respond to the next crooked halos poem.  It was breathtaking.  I love this series and I love your poetry (even though I could use a smile at some point in time, or a laugh....)  You are so wise to see the problems that plague people today,  Great Job, and thanks Gracianna for inspiring Adam....

~LCBS


Exeryone makes mistake, learn from them and move on, because tomorrow we'll make more...

[This message has been edited by LCBS (02-25-2002 10:55 PM).]

Kosetsu
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since 2001-03-10
Posts 450
Alabama, USA
2 posted 2002-02-26 06:37 PM


well...I'm glad SOMEBODY thought this was good enough to comment on. Thanks LCBS, but if you're waiting for happy stuff from me...don't hold your breath. Sorry.

-Adam

"If life is so significant, then why do we die?"

Ceinwyn
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since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175
VA
3 posted 2002-02-26 07:28 PM


Hey Young man shame on you!!:P You're poems are always good enough to respond too..it's just my mind is a bit lagged by unforeseen forces but hrm..I'm not holding my breath on happy stuff from you, I'm quite content with your feelings that you convey in your poems, I don't expect any less from you..uhh did that make sense? urgh..shame on me..atleast you aren't afraid to put them into words when others tend to push and hide them away..

Love,
Kris

LCBS
Senior Member
since 2001-11-29
Posts 532
Connecticut
4 posted 2002-02-26 08:04 PM


*Holds breath and passes out*

Yoour poetry is always good enough to respond to...as a matter a fact I sit hre an wait for a Kosetsu poem to pop up everyday...

(not really, I do have a life....somewhat)

~LCBS

Kosetsu
Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 450
Alabama, USA
5 posted 2002-02-27 08:05 AM


*snickers* So I take it this means I have fans? *plots ways to use his new army of followers* hmm....storm the chocolate shop down the street, my minions! MWAHAHAha-hack cough wheeze..

-Adam

"If life is so significant, then why do we die?"

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