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laconic Member
since 2002-02-17
Posts 64Melbourne, Australia |
For a time i grind and search my mind for all the things i need to find but all that comes to me is a rhyme lost in time telling of a line that goes my inspiration... has drained like perspiration. i'm empty like hemp i been smoked dry... everything is blind in my minds eye.. seems like i'm at the end of my life yet my concience is guilt free my life is empty of all preconcieved notions i dont see its just me no wonder no thunder and no rain no pain just me again running solo trying to seek my fame Never will i be complete without defeat again my efforts are obsolete if i must fight and lose, how can i compete to face the demon of certain defeat its hell what can i do when i know i'll lose... fight .. is all there is to do never lose sight of whats hidden from you coz in this life your never certain to lose. my inspiration has drained like perspiration ..again i'm empty like hemp i been smoked dry...*sigh* |
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peachesNcream Senior Member
since 2001-08-21
Posts 513Ocean Of Tears |
this was a really good poem..keep writing!  ~Jess   ~*~The hardest thing to do is watch someone you love, love someone else~*~ |
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LCBS Senior Member
since 2001-11-29
Posts 532Connecticut |
You did a wonderful job rhyming here...I loved the poem.... ~LCBS Exeryone makes mistake, learn from them and move on, because tomorrow we'll make more... |
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xShUgArHiGhx 
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Your poem flowed really nicely...great job hun and keep em coming! mE & cHrIsTiNe GaVe A WhOlE nEw mEaNiNg tO ThE wOrD "iNcOgNiTo" |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
oooooooooooooo!....a VERY well done piece of poetry! i enjoyed this quite a bit! Zombie |
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