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0 posted 2002-02-17 01:00 AM



In my mind,
As i look at you.
I wonder to myself softly,
"what would u do?"
"Would u do it all over again?",
"If you were given the chance?"
"would you act upon the heartfelt urge"
"Of our undying romance?"

Sadly though I am caught by suprise,
When confusion arouses where my heart now lies.
Im not sure if i'd do it all over again,
If i had the choice to be your love or your friend.
Heartache and pain could possibly be spared,
Kisses and warmth also might never have appeared.
Lies and deception would no longer linger in our minds,
We might not have had the time of our lives.

I then look back at you,
And look deeply into your eyes.
All of a sudden it all made sense,
I had finally realized.
"Of course i couldnt live a day"
"without your securing hugs"
"i would not be who i am now"
"without our undying love"

When in trouble,
Or when in doubt.
Look to you heart,
To spell things out.
If your heart,
Can not preach to you clear.
Look nearby,
The answer's standing near.

mE & cHrIsTiNe GaVe A WhOlE nEw mEaNiNg tO ThE wOrD "iNcOgNiTo"

© Copyright 2002 Michele - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2002-02-17 01:03 AM


Wow...

Sometimes I look back on my life and wish I coul do it over again and fix things.  Im glad you would do the samw things, it shows good judgement and true love.  Good for you, and great post

~Lisa

Exeryone makes mistake, learn from them and move on, because tomorrow we'll make more...

HiddenSparklez
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2 posted 2002-02-17 01:53 AM


It sounds like you've learnt a lot about your relationship & life in general... glad you shared it with everybody else.

"You do what you do, you say what you say, you try to be everything to everyone... come on now, do that stupid dance for me" -Everclear

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3 posted 2002-02-17 10:59 AM


this is a fantastic write!!! very well done
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4 posted 2002-02-17 01:06 PM


I love this i dont know what else to say but i know what you are saying in your poem. I love this!! love Clare x


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5 posted 2002-02-17 01:23 PM




okay, okay... I can also speak... very well done, I enjoyed it lots.. I just hope one day I might be able to follow this message..

"Pain doesn't hurt when it's all you've ever felt" ~Marie, the girl of a thousand truths         

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6 posted 2002-02-17 04:35 PM


I liked this alot hun. Great write with a good meaning in it. good job.
..tiff..

“A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.”

I know Im not perfect but I can smile
& I hope that you c this heart behind my tired eyes

Erin
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7 posted 2002-02-17 05:03 PM


Shugar~This is a really good piece...

"m not sure if i'd do it all over again,
If i had the choice to be your love or your friend."

I like that part alot...

I really wish I could go back and change the past 2 years of my life but I always think of this one quote and it makes me realize that Im learning more then I think I am...

Keep up the great work Shugar!!!

~ShAtTeReD mEmOrIeS,
aRe AlL i HaVe LeFt,
Of YoU aNd Me.~

Deep_Inside
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8 posted 2002-02-17 05:21 PM


there seems to be something that comes out of your poems so well i think its expirence.  thats what makes your poems interresing

Thank you for your time :shy:

when you live you die
when you die your forgotten
when your forgotten you truly die

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9 posted 2002-02-17 06:09 PM


xShUgArHiGhx
I liked this a lot.

                        Dawn

chas
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10 posted 2002-02-17 06:37 PM


this was well written... glad i took the time to read it..
gracianna
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A 14 year hell
11 posted 2002-02-17 11:02 PM


Very well written.

I give a whole new meaning to the word 'sad.'

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