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LucidityNow
Member

since 2001-02-06

Posts 118
Canada

0 posted 2002-02-15 08:59 PM

Hello everyone, I havent been here for such a long time. I think the only one of you I remember is Dopey Dope. (I used to have a different account with more posts) Anyways I am trying to come out of my writing slump and become more active again so hopefully you will be seeing alot more of me. This is a repost from a while back, i just fixed it up a bit.

As I lay here dying
I wonder why I even tried
to save that man
being held at gunpoint.

As I lay here dying
I think about my day
and the path I chose to take
that ended at this spot.

Maybe had I slept in?
Maybe had I walked the dog?
Maybe had I watched T.V?
I would not have been here dying now.

I look at the other man
and realize
he is dead.

In my vain attempt to save that slob
I have signed away my life and future...

And as I wither and die,
I cry for I
will only be remembered for what I've done
and not for who I am...

Now I beg for sleep
in agony
bleeding on my concrete pillow.

Numb, and cold, I can not breath.
My awareness collapses in around me
like a tidal wave of pain and darkness
smashing me, out of reality.

and i'm certain that if i drive into those trees, it would make less of a mess, than she's made of me...

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2002-02-15 11:19 PM

wow, this is so deep....but you have to realize, is that this "person" took a chance, and it was about helping another human being....that is a beautiful thing, no matter how you slice it....I liked this poem very much, and will try to keep an eye out on further posts from you....hopefully that writer's block is gone

See me?
Member

since 2002-02-13

Posts 93
UK

2 posted 2002-02-16 12:47 PM

this is a great post, really makes u think how one action can change everything. keep on posting i look forward to reading more of ur work. Just wondering is this fiction or truth? plz reply and once again great stuff! Clare x

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

3 posted 2002-02-17 12:21 PM

"Maybe had I slept in?
Maybe had I walked the dog?
Maybe had I watched T.V?"

Life is full of "what if's?" and "coulda, shoulda, woulda's" but the reality is that everything happens for a reason in my opinion. This was a great poem and rather deep. I can tell you put a lot of feeling and emotion into this. Great job!

mE & cHrIsTiNe GaVe A WhOlE nEw mEaNiNg tO ThE wOrD "iNcOgNiTo"

LCBS
Senior Member

since 2001-11-29

Posts 532
Connecticut

4 posted 2002-02-17 12:25 PM

I find myself wondering the what ifs all the time....but I would never doubt trying to save a life

Great Post

~lisa

Exeryone makes mistake, learn from them and move on, because tomorrow we'll make more...

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