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Kevin
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0 posted 2002-02-14 05:58 AM


Today I felt the truest form there ever was of pride
It didn’t come
From things I’ve done
Or even from inside
It came instead from someone who I hold above the world
This someone I no longer can label a little girl
This morning while in search of words
Of which I could agree
I found the words of someone who had hopes to mirror me
And now I sit here humbled
With a blank and gaping stare
It seems the world of poetry is a fam’ly affair
My little sister,
“little?”
I can’t even use the word
This “little” girl speaks with the kindest voice I’ve ever heard
Her thoughts and all her talent smaller only to her heart
And I, the “bigger” brother, never noticed at the start
Today I’ll try to make good,
Something worthy of her grace
I can’t believe my sister has upstaged me in this place

I love you lisa


© Copyright 2002 Kevin Bednarz - All Rights Reserved
DawnG
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1 posted 2002-02-14 01:03 PM


This is a beautiful poem you have written for Lisa. But upstage you, I don't think that is happening. You both write wonderfully beautiful in your own way.

                           Dawn

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2 posted 2002-02-14 03:29 PM


I didnt want you to read my poetry kev....I'm crying....your so sweet....


~Lisa
(I guess I can start using my real name now....)

Exeryone makes mistake, learn from them and move on, because tomorrow we'll make more...

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3 posted 2002-02-14 08:20 PM


  thats a great sense of pride you have for your sister.  she must have to have the same sense of pride for you.  great post you have here.
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4 posted 2002-02-14 11:43 PM


AWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW!!!!!

this is SOOOO sweet!! *runs around hugging trees*...this is really VERY VERY sweet. your parents must love you to death for being so good to each other. thanks for sharing this kev...its really very sweet

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Torn are her limbs
By quiet hands that
Tug life(color) out of her.
Gnawing edges round
Into a broken(satisfying)
Shadow

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5 posted 2002-02-15 01:43 PM


Aww This was such a sweet poem!!!! You guys r very lucky to have such a great relationship with eachother..aww Very cute!

mE & cHrIsTiNe GaVe A WhOlE nEw mEaNiNg tO ThE wOrD "iNcOgNiTo"

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6 posted 2002-02-15 03:33 PM


You know what, that's just about the sweetest thing ever

It's wonderful to see this among siblings. YAY

This was so beautiful

Jenn

"You are the strength, that keeps me walking- you are the hope that keeps me trusting."

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7 posted 2002-02-15 10:10 PM


Good poem!  I'm very glad that you have soo much pride for your sister Lisa.  She is a very good writer and so are you! Keep up the good work!

~Dan

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8 posted 2002-02-16 11:43 AM


I need to print a retraction for "Big Brother," it was a heat of the moment thing after a fight, and I shouldn't have ever posted it....

For Kev

I wish what you said was true
But sadly your mistaken
How could I ever upstage you?
Your poetry can't be shaken
You rhyme with such perfection
That you leave listeners in awe
Your meter, and your word selection
verse composed without flaw
But I have to write a retraction
for my "big brother" post
I may have had an overreaction
because I Love you the most
And sometimes I do make mistakes
Yes I know its hard to believe
but Kev, deep down inside it aches
When I see you hurt by me
So with every capitol letter
I began to get upset
And it definitly wasn't for the better
when I did something I would regret
Kev you have always been
a great big brother to me
And much to my own chagrin
It took me too long to see


~Lisa

Exeryone makes mistake, learn from them and move on, because tomorrow we'll make more...

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9 posted 2002-02-21 11:55 PM


Oh wow, this was a nice display of sibling love. This is something to cherish because I don't know many people who act like this with their siblings. I think it's something to admire. Well done.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

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