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don’t u ladies wish for a gentleman
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don’t u ladies wish for a gentleman |
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Hot_black_angel16 New Member
since 2002-02-12
Posts 5CT, USA |
don’t you ladies wish for a gentleman that will never leave you? don’t you ladies wish for a gentleman that will be by your side? don’t you ladies wish for a gentleman that will open a door for you? don’t you ladies wish for a gentleman that will be there when you need him? don’t you ladies wish for a gentleman that cares about you? don’t you ladies wish for a gentleman that has his heart in the right place? don’t you ladies wish for a gentleman that will not embarrass you? don’t you ladies wish for a gentleman that will never harm you any way? if you ladies are wishing for a gentleman like this then what am I doing wrong? [This message has been edited by Hot_black_angel16 (02-14-2002 08:25 PM).] |
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-Queth- Junior Member
since 2002-02-10
Posts 35Canada |
Women...always wanting more than what they already have...-wink- I should know too...hehe. You put some thought into this piece, which made it very reflective and personal. But as well, you brought out the human characteristics in this poem: how people are blind to what they already have, yet they hunger for what they don't have. I think we should all learn something from this, that we need to be grateful for what we do have, and not complain and long for something we don't and probably won't ever have. -nods- What I found throughout the poem is the use of the letter "u" replacing the word "you". It was a little hard for me to read the poem fluidly because although the shortened form for "you" may be easier for you to type, it makes it a little hard for me (I really shouldn't assume that all of you find it hard) to read. It almost hurts the poem, if you know what I mean. Other than that, I hope to see more from you! Q.u.e.t.h. Everything in between... |
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militantpoet New Member
since 2002-02-12
Posts 6Australia |
Nice, I enjoy insight into what the other sex want from us men, but as Queth mentioned the replacement of "you" with "u" cheapens the poem, almost like you couldn't be bothered typing the piece. Do it justice and type it, the poem's worth it. Don't take this too seriously, it's just my 2 cents. |
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DawnG 
since 2000-06-23
Posts 1494United States |
This is a great poem and unfortunately it seems like ladies seem to be attracted to the men who are the worst for them yet wonder why they are being treated with so little respect. I know what I'm talking about, I do the same thing. With a heart like yours I know you will find someone special someday. Dawn |
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sleepymoongirl Member
since 2001-04-19
Posts 157bc canada |
well i'm sad that you are hurt by being over looked by some people but i'm sure there is someone out there who will appreciate all you have to give great poem =D |
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Jose Marti Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 374washing DC |
hi well if I can lend some of my experience I can say that as far as I can see niceguys have always finished last women always turn away from those few nice guys and they end up sad a nd alone, while the bad boys get to have all the fun. I can say that I would have to agee with on that one even women i go to for advice about girls are always telling me not to treat them well. I have to say that for the guys it really does turn out better that way. |
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mateusz New Member
since 2002-02-14
Posts 7 |
your peom is very good. I dont really know why women want more than they already have. my guess is that they are testing their limitations. |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
Ohhh I so wish for a nice guy for once, I soo need a break from the *beep* I've been meeting, or saying that they love me, this was sweet and cute, I really liked it.. Kristen |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
I dont know why but I go for the guys that are total opposites from this poem. For some reason they catch my eye but they just break my heart and I go off to another one that was the same as the last. ~ShAtTeReD mEmOrIeS, |
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Devils Angel 666 Member
since 2001-11-30
Posts 71CT, USA |
Well Bart, you seem to have a lot of people liking your poem! Very good. I agree with the people from above, You should have typed out you and not "u" because it does "lower" the staus of the poem and does make it apear cheap and like you really didn't want to type it out. Good write. ~Dan |
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peachesNcream Senior Member
since 2001-08-21
Posts 513Ocean Of Tears |
this was a really good poem..and yes i think every gurl wants a guy like dat!! keep writing ~Jess   life sux |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Maybe you're trying too hard? *shrugs* I found the piece a bit repetative so I stopped reading it then came back. My guy doesn't open doors or anything like that yet still I love him to bits. He always hurts me but it's all good. He gets hurt back.  Take it easy. Things always turn out right. Thanks for sharing. ~AF~ ::Most people never listen:: |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
LOL We always want what we dont have mE & cHrIsTiNe GaVe A WhOlE nEw mEaNiNg tO ThE wOrD "iNcOgNiTo" |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
AF~I dont know why but I never expected a guy to open a door for me or anything like that...Reminds me of the movies but the first time a guy did (just recently) I was like what are you doing...And I just laughed about it...Like he thought I was that lazy I couldnt open or close the door myself... Shugar~And girls always want what they cant have...Like another girls man...LOL ~ShAtTeReD mEmOrIeS, |
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gracianna Member
since 2002-02-17
Posts 165A 14 year hell |
Unfortunately, us girls may never be pleased. *sigh* Actually, I liked your poem a lot. It tells the truth. I give a whole new meaning to the word 'sad.' |
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laconic Member
since 2002-02-17
Posts 64Melbourne, Australia |
this might help anybody watch that show Ed? well here in aus we get like really old episodes... but like the dude.. Ed i think. says something to that blonde chick like: "your not attracted to dangerous guys bcoz its dangerous but becuase its safer.. coz with them you kno its eventually gonna end" got u thinking?  my inspiration has drained like perspiration ..again i'm empty like hemp i been smoked dry...*sigh* |
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Deep_Inside Member
since 2002-02-14
Posts 377i can't stop hiding |
your not trying to hard there are gental men out there just vary few of them just trust me keep your head up and keep looking. i liked to the poem the point of the poem comes across strongly thanks for the read |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Girls don't know what they want. Anyway, you can't generalize girls because it wouldn't be fair to them. Some do, some don't. That's basically the fact of life. Some women like a gentleman, and some like the rough kind of guy. Don't ask me why.....but hey, honestly, I'm not a gentleman or a rough guy. I'm somewhere in the middle of nowhere. The poem was good, and no worries man. You'll find somebody. Just don't sweat it. I find that the act of looking is what hinders the find. Usually it's the find that does the finding. :smoking: I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Devils Angel 666 Member
since 2001-11-30
Posts 71CT, USA |
Wow Bart. This brought in alot of thought!! This is one of the most replies that I've seen for on poem in a long time!! Good job! I'll keep checking in for more poems that you are posting and writing! And to check on the reply level lol. See you lata! ~Dan |
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