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Hallucination
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since 2001-03-18
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0 posted 2002-02-12 07:27 PM


I don't know what to call it, so i thought maybe you guys could help....hope ya'll enjoy it

Best Wishes,

Brian.

"Untitled"
© 2002 Brian Eggertsen, All Rights Reserved

In a world of darkness
You are my light
And when you leave you say
Keep me in mind
I have always lived my
Life by your hand
'Cause I know you make me
A better man

I THOUGHT
FINDING TRUE LOVE
WAS IMPOSSIBLE
BUT YOU
PROVED ME ALL WRONG
TONIGHT BEAUTIFUL
I NEVER THOUGHT
THAT MAN COULD CRY
UNTILL YOU BROUGHT
TEARS TO MY EYE
DARLING YOU
YOU'RE THE REASON WHY

Pretty and beautiful
That's what you are
And you will always be
Inside my heart
I don't know what I'd do
Without you here
'Cause I feel so helpless
When you're not near

I THOUGHT
FINDING TRUE LOVE
WAS IMPOSSIBLE
BUT YOU
PROVED ME ALL WRONG
TONIGHT BEAUTIFUL
I NEVER THOUGHT
THAT MAN COULD CRY
UNTILL YOU BROUGHT
TEARS TO MY EYE
DARLING YOU
YOU'RE THE REASON WHY

It's like living in a dream tonight
But trust me when I say that...

I THOUGHT
FINDING TRUE LOVE
WAS IMPOSSIBLE
BUT YOU
PROVED ME ALL WRONG
TONIGHT BEAUTIFUL
I NEVER THOUGHT
THAT MAN COULD CRY
UNTILL YOU BROUGHT
TEARS TO MY EYE
DARLING YOU
YOU'RE THE REASON WHY

© Copyright 2002 Brian Eggertsen - All Rights Reserved
Mysteria
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1 posted 2002-02-13 04:42 AM


Very, very nice, I found myself finding a tune to go with it, now how about "You're The Reason Why"

The older I grow, the less important the comma becomes.  
Let the reader catch their own breath."
~Elizabeth Clarkson Zwart~


vlraynes
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since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...
2 posted 2002-02-14 03:12 AM



Hallucination-
  This is beautifully written.
  I really enjoyed reading it.
  I have to agree with Mysteria...I was also
  thinking of 'The Reason Why' or 'You're The
  Reason Why' for a title suggestion.
  Very nicely done.
  Hugs,
  ~Vicky


"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

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