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LCBS
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since 2001-11-29
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Connecticut

0 posted 2002-02-10 07:38 PM


I hate to see him hurt you
You don't deserve this pain
What does he get from doing this
Do your tears help him gain


I hate to see you look like this
your life has been so tough
and you don't need him to be whole
Tell him that you have had enough


He makes you feel like its your fault
But your the nicest person I know
So please dont let him push you around
That jerk has got to go

Exeryone makes mistake, learn from them and move on, because tomorrow we'll make more...

© Copyright 2002 Lisa Bednarz - All Rights Reserved
DawnG
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1 posted 2002-02-10 10:44 PM


Lisa,

Sounds like a friend of yours has been hurt pretty badly. Also sounds as if you are being a great friend to her and supporting her. I really liked this poem.

                               Dawn

AllThatGlitters4321
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2 posted 2002-02-11 02:01 PM


I thought that was really good...I had a friends just like that in a bad situation...It's nice to see that you will stick by her. Hopefully she realizes that he does have to go ....NICE JOB!!!!
AllThatGlitters4321
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since 2001-10-03
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3 posted 2002-02-11 02:01 PM


I thought that was really good...I had a friends just like that in a bad situation...It's nice to see that you will stick by her. Hopefully she realizes that he does have to go ....NICE JOB!!!!
Voiceless
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since 2001-02-19
Posts 686
Under the stars upon the wind
4 posted 2002-02-11 07:28 PM


Let's take him out back and beat him!
I mean...
Very well expressed.
The person should be happy
to have such a caring friend.
Also the set up to this poem
was awesome it flow great.
Good job!

Freedom is not Free (Korean War memorial)

LCBS
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since 2001-11-29
Posts 532
Connecticut
5 posted 2002-02-11 09:47 PM


Voiceless,
thanks for finding the voice to reply
I agree, you hodl him down and I will hit him

~LCBS

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