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Ceinwyn
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0 posted 2002-02-08 10:16 PM


Ok this is just a different view point and not exactly do I express these feelings..it has nothing to do with me:P But Valentine's day does dishearten me..

Chocolate covered promises
Diamond laced eyes
I'm not sure if I can survive
Another lonely Valentine's
I've lost people along the way
And I'm quite sure they shine down upon me
As it rains
Within my heart
But not to have them near me
Just isn't quite the same
When it's a  knife that cuts deep within my heart
When I hear people recite that "Roses are red"
I wonder how they can be red?
Shouldn't my tears
Have washed away that awful commercialized colour?
And you have would thought
That all of the sweets in the world
Would have turned acetose
When tainted by the stench of ghosts..


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LCBS
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since 2001-11-29
Posts 532
Connecticut
1 posted 2002-02-08 10:31 PM


"Chocolate covered promises
Diamond laced eyes"

Bears containing hidden motives
Roses with concealed thorns
Empty hugs and shallow kisses
leave a pair of lovers torn
A day made for Hallmark
to sell last minute cards
That might be saved forever
or might end up in shards
This day is meant to celebrate
St. Valentines Death
But instead is a famous day
for red roses and babies breath

Great Poem...Scorned Lovers Unite...Boycott VDAY!

~LCBS


Kosetsu
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since 2001-03-10
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2 posted 2002-02-08 11:00 PM


We both know what this one is about Kris....thanks for writing this. It means a lot.

-Adam

"If life is so significant, then why do we die?"

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3 posted 2002-02-09 12:32 PM


After reading this i can now add one more person on my list of "people who hate valentines day"...awesome poem!!

mE & cHrIsTiNe GaVe A WhOlE nEw mEaNiNg tO ThE wOrD "iNcOgNiTo"

Ceinwyn
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4 posted 2002-02-09 12:15 PM


Woohoo I'm on a roll and I would like to thank the Sugar and and the pain of lonliness Valentine's day causes upon this fragile heart of mine...blech..thanks guys and Adam you are quite welcome.. and LCBS awesome response


DawnG
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5 posted 2002-02-10 04:13 PM


Ceinwyn,
Add me to the list of people who think Valentine's Day is overdone. Great poem.

                              Dawn

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6 posted 2002-02-10 04:32 PM


Nice poem.  I think I might have to diss agree with some of you on the V-Day issue.  It might be because I'm so blinded by love right now that I think that V day is a very good day to get something to try to show your love for someone.  I love V day because my girl can't yell at me so much for getting her something to try to show my love for her because it's a holiday and It's my nature to get something for at lest one person on every holiday such as this.  Like I said it could be just because I'm blinded by love.  Once I get burned I'll probably see it like you guys here do but that won't be for a really long time.  Thanks for the poem!!

~Dan

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