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jaded
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since 2001-07-24
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0 posted 2002-02-08 06:04 PM


Anywhere but here / Beneath These Same Old Stars

Wishing I was somewhere else,
Wishing I was someone else
I'd rather be anywhere but here

Tonight I felt the stars shine down on me
They shined for different reasons
I felt like the only one who had nobody else

Everybody has someone else
Anybody has sombody else
Except me

What difference does it make
To tell the pain of what I feel
Sometimes it just doesn't

Sometimes I sit beneath the same old stars
That pass me by when I'm alone
The same old stars that shine when I am not

So what if this is a blackout?
Can you take those stars from above my head -
Without taking more than that?

What if you were still my friend?
Would it have changed what I said
If it had I'd be just as lonely as you

Sometimes its hard to say something that makes sense,
Even harder to mean something,
What difference does it make anyway..

Tonight you inspired me,
As I sat beneath these same old stars
That saw me cry before.

Life changes, but I'll always feel the same
Beneath these same old stars
Beneath this same old sky

So lock me in
If you stab me in the dark, close my eyes,
Will I still feel as much pain?

Look me in the eyes and tell me I'm wrong
It's not that hard
Sometimes the truth hurts, it always does.

Is it worth running from yourself?
You've travelled so far
You say we've come a long way

And you packed your bags,
And told me you would never leave
It's funny how things change

Will a poisoned rose wilt away just as any other?
a poisoned soul will tell no toll
until my time is up

but from all that dies, blossoms something new,
something fresh, and I'll still feel the same -
Beneath these same old stars.


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Demonic Illusion
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since 2002-02-07
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1 posted 2002-02-08 07:05 PM


*claps and nods*good job

Demonic Illusions, Frostic Dragons, Bloody Tears From Me To You....all surround by a force of Untouchable Darkness

xShUgArHiGhx
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2 posted 2002-02-09 12:34 PM


Awesome poem..you really seem to have gotten your feelings out in this one..nicely done

mE & cHrIsTiNe GaVe A WhOlE nEw mEaNiNg tO ThE wOrD "iNcOgNiTo"

jaded
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since 2001-07-24
Posts 20

3 posted 2002-02-09 11:40 AM


hey guys thanks for the response so far and - xShUgArHiGhx - thats such a cool name!

any more opinions appreciated lovely people

thanks

DawnG
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4 posted 2002-02-10 04:09 PM


Jaded,

This is a very sad poem, but sounds like you got a lot of feelings out. I know it feels like you are the only one who is all alone, but you're not I'm without a boyfriend, but I have great friends who I honestly feel love me a lot more than most of my past boyfriends ever thought about loving me.

                             Dawn

Devils Angel 666
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since 2001-11-30
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5 posted 2002-02-10 04:17 PM


Very nice poem! I like this one alot.  Creats a kind of mood that I can't explain.  Very good Poem!

~Dan

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Under the stars upon the wind
6 posted 2002-02-11 06:57 PM


I like this quite a bit!
lots of it falls into
the way my life has been working..
thank you for posting this
i really did enjoy it.

Freedom is not Free (Korean War memorial)

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