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Teen Poetry #5

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PurplePeopleEater
Junior Member

since 2002-01-04

Posts 11

0 posted 2002-02-07 05:04 PM

this is my second poem. its actually not that great and ive had it for awhile and i just decided to put it on here. it kinda has a hidden message but here it is:

Control

Fake almost seems real
You don’t continue to feel
It’s taking from you so very much
Awaiting the day of a real touch

Taking away from all of your senses
You can’t control it, the problem just denses
Giving is no longer here
It’s only testing your fear

Finding it’s all you care
Drinking is all you can bare
Took you whole
Another is your only goal

I’m finding you fate
It’s all hard to even compensate
Pushing through this apparent hell
To the “devil” is where the heart you will sell

Faking your life; faking your dream
You being here is not what it seems

Heavens Tears

Senior Member

since 2001-03-15

Posts 677

1 posted 2002-02-07 05:53 PM

Great job here! I am not sure if I fully got the hidden message, but I still enjoyed this. I look forward to seeing more of your poetry here!

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

2 posted 2002-02-07 10:30 PM

This was really great...it reminds me a lot of myself and my life..definately hit home...

mE & cHrIsTiNe GaVe A WhOlE nEw mEaNiNg tO ThE wOrD "iNcOgNiTo"

fearing-laughter
Senior Member

since 2001-04-24

Posts 605
land of cheese (Wisconsin)

3 posted 2002-02-12 08:21 PM

damn danimonkey that was great. i am amazed. you always told me you couldn't write, but you must of been lying. awesome job.
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Hot_black_angel16
New Member

since 2002-02-12

Posts 5
CT, USA

4 posted 2002-02-12 08:47 PM

I liked it. it was reel good but what do I know I just started one my 2ed to

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