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Android 17
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
My Child- Dumped not too long ago, My heart still aches for you. And out of nowhere---I get a call. To my surprise...it's you--- With a shocking message: "I'm pregnant" My mind races with thoughts, Can this really be true? I force myself to wake-up... But I realize this is not a dream. Not sure where to run, or who to turn to... I sit in my chair...in a trance. Our bloods mingled and the seed grew... Soon to be a child, created by us. Knowing I have to take responsibility, I'll love the child---like I once loved you... The child, concieved...by the lie of Love... |
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aaron woodside Member
since 2001-09-26
Posts 256 |
WOW Congradulations!!!!! if this is true that is. The very end of the poem is amazing. "I'll love the child---like I once loved you... The child, concieved...by the lie of Love..." I've often thought of love as something of a joke, lie, shame, etc. The realness at the end of this is great. If this is not a character write I'm glad to see you are willing to be responsible. Great write. There are no great men, only men in great circumstances. |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Omg wow...i dont know what to say!! Congratulations!!! I can imagine this is a really huge shock but its such a wonderful thing thats been created. I am shur you'll love this child w/everything you have. BoOsH bOoSh nApoLE |
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LCBS Senior Member
since 2001-11-29
Posts 532Connecticut |
You must be having a lot of mixed feelings here, your poem shows how much you will love your son or daughter, and you will be a great person. ~LCBS I was drowning in my own tears, until you threw me a life preserver |
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PoetryIsLife
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
Is it true, my friend?  What a trip it must be for you. You've created a life. I wish you luck, mate!On to the poem, well, well, well done. It portrayed the scene perfectly, with soem haunting lines. I completely enjoyed reading this piece. I love your work.  I'll love the child---like I once loved you... The child, concieved...by the lie of Love... Great lines here. How true... Are we ever ready to truely be in love? Anyhow, I'll email you back today. Talk soon! Sincerely, Titus Let the music set you free. |
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Kosetsu Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 450Alabama, USA |
Damn powerful words Alex. Keep up the work. We'll talk about this on MSN. -Adam "If life is so significant, then why do we die?" |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
ALEX????????? I'm um.... I'm um... Is it true? It can't be... Is it????? I'm in extreme shock here if it is true... Um... email me. Yeah. That's it. Um... *hyperventilates* Not my Alex!!!!! Regardless of the fact of if it's true or not, I'm glad you posted again! Email me... Sleep: The final frontier |
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Android 17
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
Very interesting replies... Others are too in love with the sound of their own voice to speak the truth... |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Is that all you can say to all of the concern we're showing????  Sleep: The final frontier |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Hmm...very interesting. If it's true and you don't want it, it's your own fault. Should have used protection. If it's not, good job of making the piece come to life. I'm sure there will be some people in here that can connect with it. It's well written Alex. Narrative in all it's goodness. Take care and thanks for posting. ~AF~ If this is all the world has to offer, I want a refund on my life. |
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Android 17
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
Thanks, Lizzy! Others are too in love with the sound of their own voice to speak the truth... |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
WOAH! this is trully very powerful writing kiddo...even *IM* having doubts about the poem being pure fiction! this could be fiction or it could be true...but the ending is somewhat happier then i would have imagined it to be if it were true. grrr...youre messing with my mind here alex...excellent write though. keep posting more!..NOW! life's not about who wins or loses, or about whos got the better car,or the most money. it's about living,and trying to make the best of what we have. |
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Devils Angel 666 Member
since 2001-11-30
Posts 71CT, USA |
Very good poem. My girl friend and I are in agreement about this. Congradulation on the kid if this is infact true. I agree with everyone else about the form and structure adn the whle visulization of this poem Very good ~Dan |
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DawnG
since 2000-06-23
Posts 1494United States |
Android17, Great poem. Dawn |
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Android 17
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
Thanks for the replies and support! Others are too in love with the sound of their own voice to speak the truth... |
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babygurl * Junior Member
since 2001-12-07
Posts 30 |
Hey Alex! AMAZING poem, still cant figure out whether it is true or not, but if it is i am here for you 170%! again it was an AWESOME poem and hopefully i will get back on here postin some stuff cause ive been slackin off!! well im gonna go! your #1 fan, Jackie |
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JBaker515
since 2001-02-28
Posts 458Dartmouth College |
TRUE OR NOT?? im awaiting....... Great write. ~~Jeff~~ |
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Android 17
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
Lol, #1 fan huh? Thanks Jackie! I'm glad to see you back here!!! Support, thanks! I'm glad to hear that!!! ^_^ True of false? Well, you'll have to uh---*gulp* ask me for yourselves! Others are too in love with the sound of their own voice to speak the truth... |
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PoetryIsLife
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
Didn't I ask you in email.... and I still don't know? LMAO.... The One, The Only... The Titus. |
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Maverick Heart New Member
since 2002-02-12
Posts 3In the darkness of my mind... |
Hello, my name is Maverick Heart. Android 17, I have read your poem and think that you are a great poet. Keep at it, it might take you places one day! I liked the last line the best! |
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