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SlowDrag
Member

since 2002-01-10

Posts 53
Tx...need i say more

0 posted 2002-02-04 10:25 PM

This is a song i wrote for a friend of mine who was having some girl trouble (who isn't??) anyway. i hope you enjoy.

Chorus:
Is it ok if i call you?
would it be alright if i dropped by?
i know you're with him now...
but do you miss me now?
it's been so long...
this can't be wrong...
let's pick up where we left off.
I know you still think of,
the way it used to be..
when it was you and me.

Verse 1:
It always felt so right,
You could have been my life.
there are so many times,
i think about those times.
i dont know what happened.
it was such a slap in
the face...
when you went away

Chorus:
Verse2:
And when I see you,
I want to meet you
all over again.
do it all again.
miscommunication,
wrecked my imagination
treated you like a queen,
and i never said those things.
now you know the truth,
but you dont know what to do.

Chorus:
Bridge:
and is it ok if i cry?
because in my heart i'd rather die.
than live without you,
dont wanna live without you
can't live without you....(can't live without you).

Chorus:

well there ya have it.

"Pardon me while I throw up, I guess some people never grow up..."

Android 17

Senior Member

since 2001-07-21

Posts 664
Winnipeg

1 posted 2002-02-05 11:27 AM

Hey---this is good! I live it! I ESPECIALLY like the last few lines in the bridge. But personally, I wouldn't ryhme words---with the exact same word. But hey, that's me! I've written a song...but I never posted it up here. Tell me...what kind of music would this song go best to?

People are too in love with the sound of their own voice to speak the truth...

DancinQueen

Senior Member

since 2000-07-29

Posts 1092
Kokomo,IN,USA

2 posted 2002-02-05 12:15 PM

ooo this is really really good. ive tried writing songs before but im never very sucessfull. this was awesome...cant wait to hear it on the radio someday

keep up the excellent work

*dq

**You can't always trust the people you want to**

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

3 posted 2002-02-05 01:39 PM

oooooOOoo i liked this one!!! You have a lotta song talent..i on the other hand can ruin a song like you'd never believe!! Keep up the great work

BoOsH bOoSh nApoLE

SlowDrag
Member

since 2002-01-10

Posts 53
Tx...need i say more

4 posted 2002-02-05 04:06 PM

Hey, thanks a lot

.
this is a more upbeat, kind of melodic punk, but not really so much punk. kind of a stroke 9 sounding song. and as for the rhyming words with the same word....it's nto so much a rhyme scheme as it is rythm. just try to imagine it as an upbeat song and it will make more sense. thanks a lot for your comments though.

p.s. the 2 "times" lines...i had a few people before ask me what that meant. it is saying there are alot of times that i....well actually my friend marc, thinks about the times he and this girl spent together.

"Pardon me while I throw up, I guess some people never grow up..."

[This message has been edited by SlowDrag (02-05-2002 04:08 PM).]

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