Teen Poetry #5 |
Winter Seams"- A springtime dream ^_^ |
chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
And basks within the open air And sighing softly, touched the ground And swirled a puddle all around. Dreaming landscapes, raptured love Tainted skies that loom above Tangled clouds that bare a storm As rainbows die, their souls transform. Whispy wind, he laughs aloud At silly little cirrus clouds That imitate and strive to be Like breaths of air, or summer breeze. A chilly stone that cools a hand That grasps it tightly in the sand Inspected first, then glanced across A river's stream, a careless loss. Feathers grace the wirey grass In blankets, soft as angel dreams That search for minds, and sometimes pass The minds that break the winter's seams. + + + + + Okee, forgive me, but I'm still getting back into the habit of rhyming. *grumble~~* -_-; I sort of stopped writing, as you could tell from the "time" poem that I am disappointed with. BAH. What was I doing? Anywho, consider this a rhymer-dimer, or, a poem worth no more than a dime of your time. ^_^ Enjoy at your leisure. ^^ -Leah Va pensiero sull' ali dorate... [This message has been edited by chasing rain (01-31-2002 12:26 AM).] |
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dastard Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 55in tearing silence |
this poem [ <== see what I chose to call it ] is definitely worth a lot more than a dime of my time... indeed great! "Pain doesn't hurt when it's all you've ever felt" ~Marie, the girl of a thousand truths |
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Jenabou Member
since 2000-06-13
Posts 215Oklahoma/Nova Scotia Canada/USA |
This is great. Don't sell yourself short!! I think its wonderful you can rhyme so well,these are the poems I have the most trouble with. Im quite impressed! *for someone who's used to heartache,losing it all was just a matter of time* |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
ugh leah. u always just make me so darn jealous. i wish i had half the skill you do. youre one of my fav poets here and its always worth my time to read a poem of yours. they just keep getting better and better. keep writing hun and i agree, dont sell yourself short. you're a great poet/writer. *hugs* tiff “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Very well written and descriptive!! Nicely done BoOsH bOoSh nApoLE |
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PoetryIsLife
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
You're amazing. You rule. You're poetry astounds me. Sorry, too mcuh? LMAO... Back to the poem, beautifully written, wonderful ryhme, and another piece of proof you have great talent, much more then I. Well done, my friend. Sincerely, Titus "Outside of a dog, a book is man's best friend. And inside of a dog, it's too dark to read." |
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