Teen Poetry #5 |
An Explination or Two |
Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
You held me last night All night long I woke up missing you But knew I hadn't been wrong You hold my love, my soul, my mind In the palm of your hand If I seem skittish and paranoid You must understand The last time I loved I was painfully burned He sent me an email Said "I'm done with you" I'm terrified that one of these days I'll get one of those from you too So if I need reminding What you feel for me It's because of my story And because to my heart, only you hold the key Ugh. I know the rhyming sucks royally, but it's 9:00 in the morning right now... give me a break. Usually my poetry is written late at night... that's why it's alwasy so stellar Just had to get something cleared up is all... Donate to Rhonda's Crossing the Atlantic Fund!!! |
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Poet Unknown Member
since 2001-08-14
Posts 140Missouri |
this was excellent Do as you please....strike forth down upon your knees...Darkness Falls on Those Without Souls |
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PoetryIsLife
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
Nicely done. Titus Naustious From The Ups And Downs Of This Earthly Existence. |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
I thought this was a really good poem reguardless of whatever time you decided to write it!! BoOsH bOoSh nApoLE |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
A wonderful poem, especially for 9:00 am *hugs* Andrew says: |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This was very well done... it's always good to have an emotional thought-dump in the form of a poem. --Marie I wish your fingers could touch all I can't say... no one should ever feel this alone. |
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rubberband Junior Member
since 2002-01-04
Posts 26Will be half Swiss one day |
That is so sweeeeeeeeet! Put your past behind you, not you past in front of you! |
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Android 17
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
PoL#2...for 9:00am---this is great. Hey...peotry needs no time, nor place, nor age! You write it...and I find that you say what you feel the more tired you are---because well...you're not quite awake and you don't realize that you're letting something slip out. Teh-heh...I know that one for a fact! But, nonetheless...I liked this poem! It got the message across---and I'm sure your guy won't do the same! I pity him if he did!!! (and hit him over the head with a bamboo stick) Others are too in love with the sound of their own voice to speak the truth... |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
I agree with Adroid...You dont need a specific time to wite...You did a great job getting the point across... If you want something very badly, set it free. If it comes back to you, its yours forever, if it doesnt, it was never yours to begin with" |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
i like this. its open and honest and serves its purpose well. i like the fact that you can use a poem to convey something which you would otherwise not be able to communicate. thanks for sharing this rhonnie...i enjoyed the read muchly life's not about who wins or loses, or about whos got the better car,or the most money. it's about living,and trying to make the best of what we have. |
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Devils Angel 666 Member
since 2001-11-30
Posts 71CT, USA |
I agree with everyone but I also find that my best poetry (although I've been told is getting better with each poem) is done best when real late at night to the point where I don't remember writing it. That is often my best work because my mind is focused on nothing else but that topic to the point where I think that both minds are working on it. Great write ~Dan |
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DawnG
since 2000-06-23
Posts 1494United States |
Skyfyre, This is a really great poem. Doesn't matter what time of day you write, I always love your poetry. Dawn |
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