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FlipAngel02
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0 posted 2002-01-26 02:19 AM




The way I feel so weak
whenever you are near,
the way you softly speak
sweet music to my ears.

The way you always smile
so innocent, yet so true,
the way you look into my eyes
if only, if only you knew.

The way I wish you felt the same
and shared this feeling, too,
the way you’ve deeply touched my heart
if only, if only you knew.

How truly special you make me feel
is what you’ll never know,
a secret too shy to spread its wings
to you, it will never show.

© Copyright 2002 Rachel Anderson - All Rights Reserved
DayDreamer99
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1 posted 2002-01-26 09:02 AM


very awesome poem....i know what ur talking about....byes!
Tifferz

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2 posted 2002-01-26 12:41 PM


Thank you for sharing this poem with us, at some point I think all of us have wondered if someone would reciprocate the feelings we had towards them... hope to see more soon

Zu

Find me a problem a pigeon can't solve and I'll find you a pigeon to solve it.

Shygirl82
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3 posted 2002-01-27 03:48 AM


Awesome poem...I am feeling ya on this one.  Its hard to love someone and not have their love returned.  Unfortunately..there isnt too much one can do about it....hope to see more from you!
~Nikki~

Smile!!  You never know who may be falling in love with it...

Chrissy
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4 posted 2002-01-27 06:51 PM


You can never lose by loving, you only lose by holding back.  You never know if something was really meant to be until you try.  It's hard, but you will feel a lot better, I promise!!!!!  Never regret something you didint do, in fact do not regret at all, because if you did it, you learned by it!!
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5 posted 2002-01-27 10:34 PM


oh man i LOVED this! Especially the last two lines. brilliant....seriously. it was awesome. keep it up!

*dq

**You can't always trust the people you want to**

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6 posted 2002-01-28 02:53 AM


great job! i enjoyed this one! tks for sharing.
robin

i have a wish but only a certain guy can fufill it!

HopelessRomanticGuy
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7 posted 2002-01-28 02:29 PM


This poem, again, is great!  I like the way you write, and the emotions involved!  Sometimes you should tell them how you feel, before it's too late (time does run out, happened to me).  Well either way, love is fun, if not the best feeling in the world!  Hope to read more!

                                                                                             -Rich

After Love comes Pain, then Love, Then Pain, then Love, then Pain..... does anyone else see a pattern here?  Oh well, can't say it's not worth it.

LoneWolf
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8 posted 2002-01-28 08:56 PM


This was good, i liked it a lot, good job

It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that.
I've learned that even when you th

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9 posted 2002-01-31 10:21 AM


Very well done I enjoyed the flow and the rhyme scheme fit together well.  I think everyone here can relate to waht you're saying.  That feeling of wonder constantly tugging at you can be a burden... try talking to him, that way he will know, and you don't have to wonder

I enjoyed this.  Nicely done.

--Marie

I wish your fingers could touch all I can't say... no one should ever feel this alone.

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