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Beneath the Flesh

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Dark Enchantress
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meet Morgana


0 posted 01-22-2002 02:46 PM       View Profile for Dark Enchantress   Email Dark Enchantress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Dark Enchantress's Home Page   View IP for Dark Enchantress

Drifting over uncertain ideas
that I can blindly entertain,
I find a numb feeling
coating itself over my senses
I fear that I may not recognize
a breath of air if I come across it
I feel thick heavy doors
made of metal and secrets
deep in my soul
Wandering through
the labyrinth of my depths,
I exist in my shadows
while searching for the door
Dark hallways of giant gray stones,
Damp and dripping with rain
I pass through quietly
Keeping my eyes
on the endless corridor
until finally I see
the two thick, heavy doors
existing intensely at the end
Yet I dare not rush to these doors
and open them with enthusiasm
For fear that the screaming girl
whose cries echo through the corridors
with a sense of hopeless captivity
that chills me to the bone
lives on the other side..
Deep inside
I think she lives there
I think she’s dying there
Fearing that I can’t save her

1.22.02

Jaime





-- the calm before the storm --

jaimespoetry.blogspot.com


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Under the stars upon the wind


1 posted 01-22-2002 10:19 PM       View Profile for Voiceless   Email Voiceless   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Voiceless

This is really interesting
The imagery is excellent
Good job!

Freedom is not Free (Korean War memorial)

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tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs


2 posted 01-22-2002 11:28 PM       View Profile for xShUgArHiGhx   Email xShUgArHiGhx   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit xShUgArHiGhx's Home Page   View IP for xShUgArHiGhx

WoW..great job!!!! Powerful stuff...nicely done!

yOu GeT wAt u PaId 4 bUt i JuS hAd nO..iNtEnTion oF liVin tHis waY --Counting crows

zarina
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3 posted 01-23-2002 04:09 AM       View Profile for zarina   Email zarina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for zarina

waw..this is so.. I don't know what to say. It's great

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4 posted 01-23-2002 11:03 PM       View Profile for Fading Away   Email Fading Away   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Fading Away

Wonderful imagery!  This was amazing, Jaime.  As usual, the darkness and eeriness was enough to make this one shine.  But the power of your words are amazing.

Well done!  I enjoyed this.  

--Marie

I wish your fingers could touch all I can't say... no one should ever feel this alone.

anonymousfemale
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Limbo


5 posted 09-24-2002 07:17 AM       View Profile for anonymousfemale   Email anonymousfemale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for anonymousfemale

Brilliant interpretation of yourself, Jaime. This really caught my attention for the simple fact that it is so *real*. Most poems are written on a superficial level but you really delve into the meaning behind the piece and bring it to life. Yay! An interesting writer!!

Thanks for the read. I'm very glad that I stumbled over this.

~AF~

"No wonder I do not make people comfortable. I am a mirror. I have far too many things to say." - Mouthing the Words

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i loved the way you described everything in this poem..you have a great imagenation.. i like it. ~+~+~JeNnYgOoD~+~+~
Broken
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The woods


7 posted 06-17-2003 08:04 PM       View Profile for Broken   Email Broken   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Broken

I feel thick heavy doors
made of metal and secrets
deep in my soul

I had a look in my library, and there you were I haven't been here for a while.
But anyway, I pulled those lines out, as they well describe the way I feel right now. And I wasn't exactly disapointet with the rest of the poem eighter. Nice piece of work.

Your friend
~Espen~

Such griefs with such men well agree,
But wherefore, wherefore fall on me ?
To be beloved is all I need,
And whom I love, I love indeed.

S.T.C

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