Very weird poem..comments more than welcome..

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Ceinwyn
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since 2000-07-09

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0 posted 2002-01-21 07:52 PM

I sign away
My sanity
And scribble away
My uncertainties
I even
Seal my ill-fated destiny
Tear laced envelope
Blood stained parchment
Frustration seeping
Temptation leaping
From word to word
Bound to insanity
And cursed by confusion
My words say goodbye
To the world
I long to leave behind...

fearing-laughter
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since 2001-04-24

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land of cheese (Wisconsin)

1 posted 2002-01-21 10:46 PM

hey this was quite cool. i really enjoyed all the wonderful metaphors you came up with. great post, thank-you for sharing it
= )

-bergundy-

maybe i'll catch fire, something nice to warm me. something pure to burn away the darkness, that hides inside my mind. -alkaline trio-

Kosetsu
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since 2001-03-10

Posts 450
Alabama, USA

2 posted 2002-01-21 10:59 PM

Woo....I've felt that way a time or two...more and more these last few days. This was in a bit different style than your others Kristen, but I think it turned out nice. The words bring to mind someone writing a suicide note..

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Again, a nice poem Kristen.

-Adam

"If life is so significant, then why do we die?"

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3 posted 2002-01-22 12:01 PM

This was a great poem!!! I could really relate to it..nicely done!

yOu GeT wAt u PaId 4 bUt i JuS hAd nO..iNtEnTion oF liVin tHis waY --Counting crows

Dark Enchantress
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4 posted 2002-01-22 12:42 PM

I agree with Adam... it reminds me of a suicide note. Or else just one symbol of how your soul is finally and for the last time turning it's back on the world and walking away... into oblivion I suppose. All too familiar territory there...

Thank you very much for posting this. I really loved reading and connecting with this poem.

Jaime

-- the calm before the storm --

jaimespoetry.blogspot.com

[This message has been edited by Dark Enchantress (01-22-2002 12:43 PM).]

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

5 posted 2002-01-23 03:22 PM

This isn't weird at all.  Trust me... I've read some much weirder (;

I enjoyed the images, and the darkness of this one.  Although, it worries me... I hope you're talking to someone about these feelings.

I enjoyed this very much... job well done.  I hope to see more soon

--Marie

I wish your fingers could touch all I can't say... no one should ever feel this alone.

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