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Don't get too close...
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Don't get too close... |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA 
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Ok this makes no sense whatsoever but to me in a weird demented way it does.. My dear friend Look at what's become of me A shell of a spirit A ghost of myself And look there My heart is upon that shelf Cobbwebbs gather Spiders tamper With what used to beat within my chest But now Now... I'm no longer myself Fading fast My faith losing it's glitter My eyes losing their shine All because I no longer know what to call mine Becareful not to get close Or even began to care Because I am fragile And before too long I just might return the favour When I'm down upon my knees I have a tendency to grow weak And to grab onto Anything remotely close to a morsel of hope So I forewarn you once again Don't get too close Or my broken heart Will begin to choke And wrap itself up with this rope And be forever bound to your words And start dreaming of your intoxicating smile... [This message has been edited by Ceinwyn (01-21-2002 05:34 PM).] |
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china doll Junior Member
since 2002-01-20
Posts 22 |
beautifully written....I know exactly how you feel, and this poem makes alot of sense to me.Sometimes it feels like your heart has been shattered, and you feel like you can never trust again.You expressed a feeling of distancing yourself from others in this poem...I Love the way it is so abstract in describing your "heart being put on a shelf". Hope to hear more! Sincerely Joanna |
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Kosetsu Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 450Alabama, USA |
Alright damnit, you're too good at writing this type of poetry. You're starting to become one of my favorite poets on here Kristen, I guess because a lot of your poems I can relate to. Beautiful imagery in this one, and I could really feel the emotion oozing out of every word of it. Keep it up. -Adam "If life is so significant, then why do we die?" |
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xShUgArHiGhx 
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
I think this makes a lot of sense actually!! I really enjoyed this hun..you write so beautifully!! Amazing job hun... yOu GeT wAt u PaId 4 bUt i JuS hAd nO..iNtEnTion oF liVin tHis waY --Counting crows |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
That last line gave me chills... very well done! The whole poem was very dark, and I only hope that all is well with you  *hugs*Nice work. --Marie I wish your fingers could touch all I can't say... no one should ever feel this alone. |
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lauren03 Member
since 2002-01-04
Posts 64oh, usa |
i really liked your poem i feel the same way now, u have a different way of expressing things u feel. i liked it cuz it relates to me |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
You don't suck at all. I understand this jaded, hurt feeling all too well. Then you just afraid to care afraid to love...but let it in... one day it'll be the right one  Nice one Jenn "You are the strength, that keeps me walking- you are the hope that keeps me trusting." |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
all I have to say is never think low of yourself you expressed your sentiments very well but let's show some inner strength hope this get better thanks for sharing là où est mon amour? |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
Wow. This was great. You put so many emotions out there, several places gave me chills. Keep up the great work! |
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LCBS Senior Member
since 2001-11-29
Posts 532Connecticut |
I think your feeling is one that we who repsonded have felt much to often...never be afraid to grab onto hope...sometimes its the only thing keeping us alive ~LCBS I was drowning in my own tears, until you threw me a life preserver |
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PoetryIsLife
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
Beautifully done here Kris! I throughouly (?) enjoyed it.  But now Now... I'm no longer myself Fading fast So many wonderful lines! Keep it up.  Titus Let the music set you free. |
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