navwin » Archives » Teen Poetry #5 » Judgemental
Teen Poetry #5
Post A Reply Post New Topic Judgemental Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
Ceinwyn
Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175
VA

0 posted 2002-01-20 07:04 PM


Why does it have to be so difficult
Why must everyone hide behind a perfect mask
So when one comes reaching out from the darkness
Others around begin to shudder
Yet hide behind their disapproving laughs
It's not right
It's not fair
To be tied up in such a judgemental affair
Who are you kidding
Who are you lying to?
When we all perfectly know we have nothing to prove
I'm sorry to point this out
But Someone younger or perhaps older
Isn't better than me or you
Age is just a number
And that smile upon someone's face
Is just another jewel added
To this masquerade
I'm fed up when I look around
I can no longer take this sitting down
I'm tired
Tired of people being pushed around
For their feelings and for their fears
When everyone is just human
Yet so disapprovingly judgemental...

© Copyright 2002 Kristen Brandon - All Rights Reserved
Kosetsu
Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 450
Alabama, USA
1 posted 2002-01-20 09:19 PM


That hits home pretty hard.....people are always accusing people for being different. I know I go through it every day. I really liked this one Kristen. I did notice a few places where certain words seemed to not fit quite right, but other than that, I can't find much of any problem with it. Very nice work.

-Adam

Fading Away
Deputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Elite
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia
2 posted 2002-01-20 09:38 PM


You're correct... it's not right.  But, unfortunately, that's our twisted, conformed society for you.
"Why must everyone hide behind a perfect mask"
That was my favorite line.  There is lots of truth behind the words in this piece.
I really enjoy your work... you're a talented poet.  I hope to see more soon

--Marie

I wish your fingers could touch all I can't say... no one should ever feel this alone.

xShUgArHiGhx
Deputy Moderator 10 ToursDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Elite
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs
3 posted 2002-01-20 11:49 PM


U GO!!! Powerful piece hun!! Nicely written I could really feel the emotion in there..

yOu GeT wAt u PaId 4 bUt i JuS hAd nO..iNtEnTion oF liVin tHis waY --Counting crows

Ceinwyn
Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175
VA
4 posted 2002-01-21 04:57 PM


Adam you are too kind and the rest of you are also...ha! and quite honestly I like this one myself..it wasn't about me so I am capable of writing about stuff other than love!! go me!!
Post A Reply Post New Topic ⇧ top of page ⇧ Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.
navwin » Archives » Teen Poetry #5 » Judgemental

Passions in Poetry | pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums | 100 Best Poems

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary