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lone_poet707
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0 posted 2002-01-18 02:58 PM


Hate me-
I know you want to.
I see your face twist
into a mangled colage
of anger and jealousy
when I do something
right.  I feel you stab
at me with your eyes
when I walk by.
I hear the lies you
spread to bring me
to your own level.
But you can't shake me
from my perch high above
your childlike ways.
I'm too strong.
I'm too happy with my life
to allow such feeble
attempts at hurting me
to break me down.
No matter what you do
or say, I will still
be the same guy
u hate each and every day.
so, go ahead-
Hate me.



© Copyright 2002 Joe Hawley-Shepherd - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2002-01-18 03:54 PM


Sometimes having enemies is just as important as having friends---it is not upto you whether people hate you or not...it's upto the people---and how dense they are. Hating someone means you can't cope with your problems---that's probably why I hate myself...

Good write! Although I think it could be abit longer. And ryhming mighta helped! But it's your work...not mine!

[b]"Snake, always remember that your mind if your most dangerous weapon. If things get too complicated---simplify your thoughts![b]

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2 posted 2002-01-18 11:09 PM


this reminds me of a girl at my school that everyone hates/admires...nicely done Thanks for sharing!

yOu GeT wAt u PaId 4 bUt i JuS hAd nO..iNtEnTion oF liVin tHis waY --Counting crows

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3 posted 2002-01-19 12:13 PM


Hehe. None of my business, but sudden curiosity regarding who you're referring to here.

Anywayz, it's great to know that you hold a good control over your life and that you're confident, and this person's attempt to bring you down has failed.

_,,,^.^,,,_
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4 posted 2002-01-19 05:24 PM


Don't ever regard people who are just jealous of you.  It's their problem that they are so inadequite anyway.

This is a well-written poem.  Thanks for sharing it with us.  Job well done.  

--Marie

I wish your fingers could touch all I can't say... no one should ever feel this alone.

lone_poet707
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5 posted 2002-01-19 06:14 PM


i must agree with Android here- it would have been a much better poem if I had made the effort to rhyme, however when you havent been able to complete a single stanza to your own liking- let alone a whole poem in almost 2 months, just about anything that gets finished is satisfactory in your own eyes.
  -Joe

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6 posted 2002-01-19 11:20 PM


Oohhh burn. I loved this!!

"You are the strength, that keeps me walking- you are the hope that keeps me trusting."

Zukene_Chic
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7 posted 2002-01-19 11:53 PM


Wow. Talk about masochisim!
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8 posted 2002-01-20 02:08 AM


haha man this poem was great. sort of like saying "screw you" to everyone. it made me smile. thanks for sharing this.
-bergundy-

maybe i'll catch fire, something nice to warm me. something pure to burn away the darkness, that hides inside my mind. -alkaline trio-

lone_poet707
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9 posted 2002-03-04 09:13 AM


In response to Zukene_Chic: I respect your opinion and appreciate you taking time to read this piece. Masochism certainly was not my intent.  
     The Random House Dictionary defines masochism as such "1. The condition in which sexual gratification depends on physical pain, esp. inflicted on oneself.  2. Neurotic gratification from physical pain and humiliation."
     In this poem i am stating that the infliction of pain by someone else will not bring me down, nor affect my life in a negative way.
  -Joe

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