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Teen Poetry #5

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AshlieAcklin
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since 2002-01-17

Posts 6

0 posted 2002-01-18 12:08 PM

This may be a repost, but it is one of my favorites. ENJOY

Mascara Flavored Tears
So many unforgettable mistakes
Mistakes I pay for every day
People can be so [edit] cruel
Hopelessness, Confusion, Undescribable Uncertainties
Insecurity, Embarrassment, Shame
Slowly devouring my exposed body
Sleep - my only escape
Dreading daybreak
Welcome to another pathetic day
Can someone please end this obsolete existance
Impossible

AMA 1-11-01

[This message has been edited by Mon Cherie (01-20-2002 01:16 PM).]

xShUgArHiGhx

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since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

1 posted 2002-01-18 10:00 AM

Wow...this really hit home for me...a big part of my life was like this and it lasted for a LONG time..i know how your feeling...::hugs::

yOu GeT wAt u PaId 4 bUt i JuS hAd nO..iNtEnTion oF liVin tHis waY --Counting crows

Marshalzu

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since 2001-02-15

Posts 2681
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2 posted 2002-01-19 04:29 PM

I really enjoyed the read, you a really good poet and I'd liek to see more of your work

"All things must end, but I can see my fate in your eyes" -Turin Breaks

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

3 posted 2002-01-19 07:10 PM

Good work. I enjoyed this, but be careful about the language in the future

I've enjoyed reading your work, and look forward to seeing more.

--Marie

I wish your fingers could touch all I can't say... no one should ever feel this alone.

Dark Enchantress
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since 1999-07-27

Posts 1258
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4 posted 2002-01-19 08:10 PM

I really liked this poem. It had some desperation, anger, sadness in it expressed very, very well. You have a way of wording your emotions that really gets the point across.

Jaime

-- the calm before the storm --

jaimespoetry.blogspot.com

Zukene_Chic
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since 2001-09-26

Posts 152
Cali

5 posted 2002-01-19 11:54 PM

So true. But what happens to the people (me) who retreat to sleep, only to find pain and hurt in their dreams? Or are they nightmares...

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