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Purging Of The Dead
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Purging Of The Dead |
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Hardkore Junior Member
since 2001-01-31
Posts 33San DIego, California |
I want to kill, Rip out their bitter hearts, crying, and hold them in my palm I want to heal Swallow the world's discontent, Destroy the pain and tears I must create Existential catharsis Meticulous scribblings With biblical intent Dismay and mistrust through my pen I thrust My tears and blood mix a deplorable color Furthers my disgust Passion fuels my love |
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HiddenSparklez Member
since 2000-12-29
Posts 190British Columbia, Canada |
Your nickname defintely describes your work as well... very "hard core". I think this was a very good emotional poem... imagery was great in this piece as well... From what I understand and hope, is that you're a fighter... you use such challenging words, yet mix it with words of strength... I guess it's a sign of how you're a fighter... that's how I see it, as positive as possible. "You do what you do, you say what you say, you try to be everything to everyone... come on now, do that stupid dance for me" -Everclear |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Although I didn't like the portrayed message, I think you did well with this. The violence isn't exactly my cup of tea, but I did understand what you were trying to say. Nice work  I hope to see more... --Marie 'Things are getting worse but I feel a lot better... and that's all that really matters to me.' [This message has been edited by Fading Away (01-17-2002 10:03 AM).] |
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Mon Cherie
since 2001-10-31
Posts 922Land of Never-ending Summers |
You got that right... it's too bloody, and that makes a disgusting colour. But this is indeed well written. Hope to see more of your less gory works! _,,,^.^,,,_ |
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