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Ceinwyn
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since 2000-07-09

Posts 2175
VA

0 posted 2002-01-14 08:18 PM

Want to know
What runs through my head
Each time my heart plays dead
Once I am face to face with you
I'm even quite sure
That you are curious
To why I keep on running away
And why I continually control you
Like a puppet on a string
But that's not what I intended
My heart turns out to be pretending
I guess I'm just lonely
Looking for something familiar
And I know that's wrong
I can't hide behind the constant pain
And constantly cry out your name
Each time I fall down off of Love's Bike
I just guess next time
I won't reach out for a bandaide from you
I apologize time and time again
But I know that doesn't change
The pain I put you through
I just always find out
Just as I'm close to the edge
And when it's my heart that tells my head
That my love for you
Has been long dead
So I guess I am using you
I've been honest with you
Telling you my feelings
Once I even cried out between sobs
That I'm afraid I'm using you
But I think you were avoiding the truth
Thinking that I was just confused
And that I would never let my heart be subjected to that sort of abuse
But it's true
Oh my God it's true
I'm sorry, I've done this to you
I'm sorry, I always run away from affection
And always assume
That this too was going to end up
To be just like the rest
And that you just intended to hurt me
But that still gives me no right
To turn my pain upon you...

xShUgArHiGhx

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since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

1 posted 2002-01-14 09:30 PM

This was beautifully written and it had a lot of feeling and emotion in it..i enjoyed it a lot...amazing work

yOu GeT wAt u PaId 4 bUt i JuS hAd nO..iNtEnTion oF liVin tHis waY --Counting crows

Yezea, your Angel
Junior Member

since 2001-06-08

Posts 11
Canada

2 posted 2002-01-15 12:59 PM

Nice Poem Ceinwyn I can feel the feelings you put in this poem.. continu your good work

Mon Cherie

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since 2001-10-31

Posts 922
Land of Never-ending Summers

3 posted 2002-01-15 11:34 AM

Great work, Kristen.
And I hope you'll find love soon, and this person will feel happy for you too. It may seem that you're using him, but I guess there are times when you need to turn to someone who knows you well, but you MIGHT find no one except him.

_,,,^.^,,,_
Florence

Kosetsu
Member

since 2001-03-10

Posts 450
Alabama, USA

4 posted 2002-01-16 08:58 AM

I really liked this poem Kristen. The words were chosen nicely, and the flow was good, though I did notice one or two places where it may have been better making two lines where you just had one. I think this is the first poem that I've read from you, and I must say that I liked this because it fits my past a bit.

You can't go thinking that every guy is going to hurt you though...well, you can, but you'll never be happy if you do. Each new person has a clean slate. You won't know if they're gonna be any different until you find out. More often than not, it'll seem like they're just another jackass, but soon you'll find one of the good guys.

-Adam

"I like pigs. Dogs look up at us. Cats look down on us. Pigs treat us as equals." - Winston Churchill

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

5 posted 2002-01-17 01:09 PM

And I know that's wrong
I can't hide behind the constant pain

That's the way to think... this poem is very heavy... it's obvious you put a lot of yourself into it. But I think a good deal of thinking rationally is in need... think with your head, not your heart. Your head will get you farther

Hang in there

*hugs* Enjoyed it... and looking forward to more.

--Marie

I wish your fingers could touch all I can't say... no should ever feel this alone.

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