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the insomnia

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the reign of chaos
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0 posted 06-23-2002 11:19 PM       View Profile for the reign of chaos   Email the reign of chaos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for the reign of chaos


With it's own darkened grace
it slowly reached out it's hand
and as a fitted glove of lace
it encompassed the twilighted land

in it's net of knitted cloth
were strewn a thousand lights
and as flew high a single moth
another silent group took flight

The vastness of the universe
struck me with a numbing awe
and as the moon began to traverse
a majestic world i now saw

I looked up at the same night sky
as i had for many an eve
and in my heart i knew i had lied
from the place i can never leave.


hey, if you could plez tell me what you think of this, that would be great.  thanks

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A Cloud In the Sky


1 posted 06-24-2002 11:29 AM       View Profile for cutiepiesugarbabie   Email cutiepiesugarbabie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for cutiepiesugarbabie

Welcome to Passions!
(hehe my first time to get to say that)
Happy to have such a great poet become a part of Piptalk!! hehe Enjoy!

o*~Everyone makes mistakes-get over them and make more tomorrow!~*o

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Under the stars upon the wind


2 posted 06-24-2002 12:09 PM       View Profile for Voiceless   Email Voiceless   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Voiceless

Hey Welcome,
I like it!
I can't wait to read
more chaos!
Thanks hun for posting.

Freedom is not Free (Korean War memorial)

songsoftheaftermath
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a world of disarray


3 posted 06-26-2002 04:26 AM       View Profile for songsoftheaftermath   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for songsoftheaftermath

me likes this poem, poet!

i think the only thing that threw me off course was the second last line where you wrote "from" it just doesnt go with the rest of the poem. but you did an excellent job with the rest of it. i think you're developing well!

WELCOME!



post more soon!

could the darkness be my friend?

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Under the stars upon the wind


4 posted 01-24-2004 01:53 AM       View Profile for Voiceless   Email Voiceless   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Voiceless

just wanted to get it in the library

Freedom is not Free (Korean War memorial)

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