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When I Turn Around
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When I Turn Around |
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inspiredpoetwriter Member
since 2002-01-05
Posts 104Minnesota |
When I Turn Around Will his smile Set me at ease? When I Turn Around Will his bluish Green eyes take My breath away? When I Turn Around Will his voice Set me on fire? When I Turn Around Will his finger Send shivers down My spine? When I Turn Around Will his kisses Make my haert do A roll in my chest? When I Turn Around Will he want me Now?Tommorrow? Forever tonight? When I Turn Around Will his warmth Settle my demons? When I Turn Around Will he make me promises That'll make me stay? When I Turn Around Will he make me Laugh by the expression On his face? When I Turn Around Will he bring me the Stars? sun? The moon? When I Turn Around Will he understand How special he makes me Feel? When I Turn Around Will his tender comfort Send tingles To my toes? When I Turn Around Will he the one I marry? When I Turn Around Will he be my lover Forever? When I Turn Around Will his love last Till death to us Part? |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
 Hi, Inspired! Welcome to Teen Poetry. I'm glad that you decided to join us  This is a very well-written poem. The repitition really worked for the poem, and made the words much more powerful.You're very talented, and I look forward to reading more, but for a heads up: guidelines say you can only post 3 poems in a day's time. So be careful with that And don't forget to let other's know what you think of their work too Again, welcome, and wonderful job. --Marie "It was a long December, but there's reason to believe that maybe this year will be better than the last." (Counting Crows) |
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PoetryIsLife
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
Welcome to Passions! Glad you're here! I loved this piece! Very real, very open, and very well written. Looking forward to seeing more of your work and more of you around the place. Oh, and check you're email for a special greeting. God bless.Sincerely, Titus The One, The Only... The Titus. |
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