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Dark Enchantress
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0 posted 2002-01-03 01:11 AM


Secret desires falling
in and out of opportunity
And here we go,
Would you like to see?
Or would you rather
have me whisper it in your ear?
Somehow I think
that you know what it is
It’s thick in the air –
you can taste it
and breathe it in
Does it make you hungry?
Like a man without water
in the hot, dry desert –
Do you need it?
It consumes me greedily,
commanding and demanding
for me to follow it’s will
So just let me have my way,
but just don’t make it too easy
I’d take pleasure
in conquering you
and then licking your wounds

1.3.02

The only thing that I fear is to die quietly.

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lil_pwheeler
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1 posted 2002-01-03 01:42 AM


Deep and creepy. Just my style
Pat

Dark Enchantress
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2 posted 2002-01-03 01:46 AM


Glad I'm not the only one. Bwahahahaha..

The only thing that I fear is to die quietly.

Read between the lines.

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TopGunLauren
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3 posted 2002-01-03 03:06 AM


Very deep and I don't know how to feel about it but very interesting piece anyway.
  Lauren

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4 posted 2002-01-03 11:10 PM


LOL @ Jaime...

This is a very well-written piece.  And, as was said, dark and creepy... but that's your thing.  And I love it

I really liked the analogies and imagery you have going on in the poem. I enjoyed this, and I hope to see more soon

--Marie

"It was a long December, but there's reason to believe that maybe this year will be better than the last." (Counting Crows)

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5 posted 2002-03-20 03:43 AM


Deep and creepy indeed. Wow.... I loved this one. I must say, the title drew me in, and you did not dissapoint. Tell me Black Widow... what did you mean by these lines?

So just let me have my way,
but just don’t make it too easy
I’d take pleasure
in conquering you
and then licking your wounds

Casual sex is overated indeed. This line always reminds me of the Rock p the movie taht is... "Or I'd take pleasure in... gutting you..... BOYYYY."

It consumes me greedily,
commanding and demanding
for me to follow it’s will

So true. So true.

Another spellbinder My Memina.

Sincerely,
Mon Verite

My motto... always changing, always improving, living life in veiw of eternity.

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6 posted 2002-03-20 04:39 PM


i don't know about this one hmmmmmm

i am me don't tell me different!!
JEFF IS ONE HOT STUD *RAWR*
i want him *DROOLZ*
dam hes hott!!!

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7 posted 2002-03-20 07:54 PM




Well, I didn't see this as dark and creepy..hehe but I'm just being bad aren't I. I loveeeeeeeee this hehe... you're good

lol
jenn

"You are the strength, that keeps me walking- you are the hope that keeps me trusting."

Dark Enchantress
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8 posted 2002-03-20 08:03 PM


I didn't really think of it as dark and creepy either... just a little naughty.

Thanks you guys.


"The most beautiful makeup for a woman is passion, but cosmetics are easier to buy." - Yves Saint Laurent

Cela passera.

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[This message has been edited by Dark Enchantress (03-20-2002 08:03 PM).]

cherish
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swimming in fairy floss...........
9 posted 2002-03-21 12:24 PM


"Does it make you hungry?
                               Like a man without water
                               in the hot, dry desert –
                               Do you need it?"


Oooooooooooooooooo!!....someone's getting *ahem*horny*cough.. ..im loving these latest pieces from you jaime...post more now! MORE! NOW!...its an order

My england is goodly- are you strudable?

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