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Cinderelly
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0 posted 2001-12-31 01:15 AM


An actress living a lie,
a princess without a prince,
a dreamer waking to reality,
a fairytale waiting to be . . .


Simply put, the me I don't want to be.


© Copyright 2001 Jamie - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-12-31 01:19 AM


hey hey!! I thoroughly enjoyed it! I like poetry that twists cliches, very nice!
Voiceless
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2 posted 2001-12-31 04:15 PM


well first off,
Welcome!
yes i so was the first to say it!
I can't believe it!
YES!
Okay anyway, i loved it short
with a powerful message.
Flow is good,
setup is awesome.
Nicely done!
And I can't wait to read more!
So see ya around!
~jen

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Ina
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3 posted 2001-12-31 06:00 PM


this was very good, short but good.
keep on writing.
welcome to passions! hope u coninue to share your work with us

Regina

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4 posted 2001-12-31 10:02 PM


WELCOME TO PASSIONS!

Great write here! It was short, but sometimes short poems are the best. Love it!

You know you're Canadian when if something's broken, the first thing you ask is if it can be fixed with WD-40 or Duct Tape

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5 posted 2002-01-01 09:29 PM


WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!!!!

Wow...great first post...short and sweet and sums up so much at the same time! I cant wait to read more from you hopefully in the near future  


ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

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Melster
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6 posted 2002-01-01 09:44 PM


WONDERFUL!!!

Looking for More!!

Melster!!

P.S.

WELCOME!!

TopGunLauren
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7 posted 2002-01-02 03:10 AM


Short but nice I liked it.
  Lauren

"I just needed someone to talk to you were just to busy with yourself."-Staind


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8 posted 2002-01-02 05:33 PM


Welcome to passions, I loved your first post short and sweet. I hope to see more of your work in the furture

Andrew

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Don't touch anything, Don't let this moment go -Seafood

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9 posted 2002-01-02 06:36 PM


OH WOW! I loved it. What a wonderful piece! Fantastic. Again, I loved it. Very poignant, and deep. Great write! Oh, and welcome. You'll love it here.

Titus

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prov1717
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10 posted 2002-01-02 07:50 PM


short and sweet, nice job, i look forward to more
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11 posted 2002-01-03 06:15 PM


Welcome to Passions in Poetry!

I really liked this.  Very short, but powerful.  I loved the optimistic tone in the last line.  I thought this was one of those poems telling about your life... this is what you are.  But that last line completely impressed me.  It shows your maturity through words.  Very nicely put.  I enjoyed this.  Keep posting all your work, but don't forget to reply too.  Posting is a two-way-street.     I look forward to reading more.
And again, welcome!

--Marie

"It was a long December, but there's reason to believe that maybe this year will be better than the last." (Counting Crows)

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