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0 posted 2001-12-29 12:35 PM


Sparkling green eyes,
Bitter sweet starre.
I miss you before your gone,
I long for you to be here.
A million things i'd love to show you,
So many secrets i wish to share.
So many thoughts interrupt my gazing,
Too many things have to be unfair.
Why cant things be perfect?
Why cant they sometimes be just right?
I think you and i deserve it,
We dont back down to a problem we put up a fight.
So why do others smile,
When you and i share a frown?
Why must the world be up,
And look at us pressed against the harsh cold ground.
It doesnt matter i guess,
Wether we are on top of the world or below.
I love you and thats all i need,
Thats the only thing i surely know.
As long as i have you,
It wont matter where my place may be.
As long as im with you,
And you are beside me.


Hey guys--
Im not really shur where this poem came from actually and i dont know if it made any sense because its like 12:30 here and im falling-off-my-chair-tired. I miss my boyfriend so much because he left tonight to go to los angeles and las vegas for a week and a day and im scared because all the flights that the terrorists have been on have been west coast flights..and so i've been thinking of him so much and i guess this is what came out of it..i just needed to write something about him so im sorry if this isnt my best..it wasnt meant to be...

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

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1 posted 2001-12-29 12:48 PM


I think you did a good job sleepy-missing-your boyfriend-kinda gal Say a prayer for him, and get some sleep He'll be ok (((hugs)))
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2 posted 2001-12-29 03:39 AM


You did a really goood job for writting this so late at night.But anyway I love this piece and keep up the awsome work.
  Lauren

"I just needed someone to talk to you were just to busy with yourself."-Staind


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3 posted 2001-12-29 09:33 AM


Awww heheh thanks for the hug sea!!!! Im glad both of you enjoyed it! But im still kinda sad..its the next morning and i still havent heard from him and he said he'd call when he got there

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

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4 posted 2001-12-29 12:09 PM


Such a sweet poem!
I liked it alot.
Very well for the time.
He'll call don't worry
got give him a chance, it might
have been to late to call.
So smile okay!

Freedom is not Free (Korean War memorial)

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5 posted 2001-12-29 12:23 PM


Absense makes the heart grow fonder I enjoyed this poem!  It's very sweet... and don't worry about your guy.  He'll be alright

--Marie

"It's been a long December, and there's reason to believe that maybe this year will be better than the last." (Counting Crows)

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6 posted 2001-12-29 06:18 PM


Thanks everyone for your replies I miss him so much but he did call while i was out today and he landed safely thank god

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

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7 posted 2001-12-30 10:45 AM


this was good, all the best to you and your boyfriend,
their's a traveler's prayer, that some of us jewish people use. Its in hebrew, but ill say for your boyfriend, just to help ease the worry.

by the way....i think u need to sleep...it helps cleanse the mind.

Regina

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8 posted 2001-12-30 04:21 PM


the best time to write is late at night..i think anyway i love the line about i miss you before your gone....thats tight.  well keep it up!
les

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9 posted 2001-12-30 05:27 PM


I cna't put it better then has been said but I have to say, I too write best at night, and I enjoyed these lines best:

As long as i have you,
It wont matter where my place may be.

Nice write.

Titus



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10 posted 2001-12-31 01:03 PM


Thank you everyone for the replies and thank you INA for your prayer I love writing at night..my mind is free and clear and usually i get the best stuff out of it Thanks again guys!

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

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11 posted 2002-01-01 09:41 PM


Great Piece Of Work, I find it easiest to write at night when my head is going a hundred mile an hour!!  Good Work!!  

Melster!!

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12 posted 2002-01-02 01:45 PM


Thanks mel

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

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13 posted 2002-01-15 05:34 PM


You should look at it this way
You having him is not being pressed to the ground
Don't take what you have for granted
Did you ever think others envy you and what you have?
You seem to be a great person too
And boy can you write
I believe you are up there
not down in the dirt
good luck in life and God bless

là où est mon amour?
donde está mi amour?
wo ist meine Liebe?
Nelly Furtado é a menina a mais bonita no mundo largo do todo.


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14 posted 2002-01-16 08:26 AM


Thanks acire...i didnt even really think to look at the poem in an optimistic sense but i think ur right too..and thank u

yOu GeT wAt u PaId 4 bUt i JuS hAd nO..iNtEnTion oF liVin tHis waY --Counting crows

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15 posted 2002-01-16 02:04 PM


great post!!! i love it *adds it to her library*
*Pixie*

-=Love starts with a SMILE, grows with a KISS, and ends with a TEAR=-

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16 posted 2002-01-17 09:22 PM


While reading your poem it reminded me of me and my friend Jamie..we have to just be friends but I love him dearly and after reading acire's response I'm thinking yeah..ppl would be envious to have someone to love either they are together or not..so I know what you meant by this though I'm making no sense:P but it hit home..Im glad I read it..including his response...I think I wont be pulling my hair out anymore..

Love,
Kristen

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17 posted 2002-01-17 11:09 PM


It really means so much to me that my poem helped u in a way along w/acire's response I'm glad you read it too

yOu GeT wAt u PaId 4 bUt i JuS hAd nO..iNtEnTion oF liVin tHis waY --Counting crows

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18 posted 2002-01-19 11:10 AM


i'm glad you see my point *hugs*

là où est mon amour?
donde está mi amour?
wo ist meine Liebe?
Nelly Furtado é a menina a mais bonita no mundo largo do todo.


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