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prov1717
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0 posted 2001-12-26 01:46 PM



a million times i've missed you
a million times i've cried
if love could have saved you
you never would have died
the things we feel most deeply
are the hardest things to say
my dearest one, i loved you
in a very special way
i often sit and think of you
and think of how you died
to think i couldn't say goodbye
before you closed your eyes
no one can know my loneliness
no one can can see me weeping
all my tears from an aching heart
while others are sleeping
if i had one lifetime wish
a dream that could come true
i'd pray to God with all my heart
for yesterday and you.

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1 posted 2001-12-26 03:17 PM


ok, it's not nice to make me cry....you should have a warning or something. Tissues!!!! I need tisues!!!!!

I thought of my Aunt, I miss her every day.
Yesterday I had to fight the tears I wanted to cry. somedays it's a fight I loose.

I am keeping this

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2 posted 2001-12-26 08:26 PM


You really are an amazing writer...This reminded me of a sudden death of my friend that took place jus recently...im sorry that this happened hun..and know i sort of understand ::hugs::...beautiful write...

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

prov1717
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3 posted 2001-12-27 12:32 PM


thanks guys!
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4 posted 2001-12-27 11:30 AM


Wow, you hit a sensitive spot with this one indeed.

You portrayed heavy emotions here, and you did it well.  Very nicely done!

I also wanted to tell you how appreciative I am that you seem to love to read and reply to other's poems.  You seem to be everywhere in Teen 5, and I'm enjoying it

Nicely done, here!

--Marie

If there's one thing I've learned, it's that the most frustrated people in the world are those who know they're stupid, but keep trying anyway.

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5 posted 2001-12-28 03:15 AM


i liked this poem a lot! great work!  
robin

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Shygirl82
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6 posted 2001-12-28 04:44 AM


Very well written..a very difficult subject to write one..but you managed quite well.  Thanks for sharing and I hope all gets better VERY soon (((((hugs)))))
~Nikki~

Smile!!  You never know who may be falling in love with it...

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7 posted 2001-12-29 12:32 PM


Good job. It was a sad poem and it reminded me of my grandfather who just passed away. I hope to read more of your work and keep up the great work.
Lovely_Kris

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8 posted 2001-12-29 01:25 PM


I think you have just broken that wall I took so long to build around my heart these past few months..your words were so haunting, my heart just feels soo swelled up with emotion but you don't hear me complaining, I'm glad I read this..

Love,
Kristen

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