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0 posted 2001-12-26 12:10 PM


i try to live my life day by day,
but something always gets in my way.
no one seems to notice,
that's cus there not aware.
so they just sit and stare.

life has got me by the throat.
tighter and tighter it's grip gets.
i try to break free,
but no one knows,
so they can't help me.

if only i could make them see.
how mean life can be.
it's grip gets tighter with each struggle.
i think i'm losing the battle.

it's grip is loosening and i can breathe.
this can't be!
it's a trick!
am i still alive?
is it true, did i win?
is the battle done?

~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~

for only time can tell when the grip will tighten.
so i go on with my life day by day.
till something else gets in my way.

repeat after me: punk is the best music ever created!

© Copyright 2001 Robin Hill - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-12-26 02:49 AM


this is a tight poem, its true...something else will always happen, thats just life, go with it, love it and have fun ya know.  i understand your poem completely, sometimes there is no way that people can really see where you are coming from i guess. anyway, keep it up......peace.
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2 posted 2001-12-26 05:33 AM


yea i think this is a hard poem to relate to if ya don't nderstand it!

repeat after me: punk is the best music ever created!

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3 posted 2001-12-26 01:20 PM


"life has got me by the throat.
tighter and tighter it's grip gets.
i try to break free,
but no one knows,
so they can't help me."

You did a wonderful job in expressing some pretty heavy emotions in this poem.  Very well done, Robin.  And if you are having a hard time, I hope things get better for you.

*hug*

--Marie

If there's one thing I've learned, it's that the most frustrated people in the world are those who know they're stupid, but keep trying anyway.

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4 posted 2001-12-30 12:04 PM


I really enjoyed this poem.
and you are right punk is the greatest music along with techno...
keep on writing.

Regina

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5 posted 2001-12-30 12:36 PM


Life's a *****, what else can I say? You just got to figure out a way to get by. Find the beauty. The rest is just details. Great poem... thanks for sharing.

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6 posted 2001-12-30 02:25 PM


This is a great poem.  All anyone can do is live day by day.  Just keep your head up.  Great job here!
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7 posted 2001-12-30 05:31 PM


Wow, what can I say? What a wonderful piece. I enjoyed it. Very real. Keep your head up. We're all here for you. My prayers are with ya Robin...

Sincerely,
Titus

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8 posted 2001-12-30 09:00 PM


Yeah life can suck sometimes but keep living your life day by day and you wil get through anything.Nice poem I really liked it.
  Lauren

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9 posted 2001-12-30 11:46 PM


I've said it once, and I'll say it again:

You're NOT losing the battle! You're not allowed!

Don't give up, hon. It's hard, but you have at least two very important people backing you up with prayers.

Don't give up.

Love ya!

Rhonda

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10 posted 2001-12-31 02:21 PM


rhonda-like i told ya it just feels liek i am.

ti-hey hun speechless huh? thks for the prayers.

gina-hey girl haven't seen you around in a while! yup punk is rad! techno umm i won't go there lol!

zu-you liked it you really really liked it!

repeat after me: punk is the best music ever created!

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11 posted 2002-01-01 09:14 PM


Don't loose the battle because you can win robin!!!! Life takes us by the troat every now and then to challenge us so challenge it right back!!!

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

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12 posted 2002-01-02 09:54 AM


as long as i got friends like yall behind me i know i can't loose.

repeat after me: punk is the best music ever created!

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13 posted 2002-01-02 10:59 PM


So true..
Simply great, what else can I say...

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