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0 posted 2001-12-24 07:05 PM


Snow

A million Angels f
                            l
                         o
                      a
                          t    
                           i
                        n
                           g
d
o
w
n
to Earth
Smothering all in a pure glow
  Good will amongst
               MAN
Poets romanticise
    While he reaps the angel tide
And salts the healing wounds
    His bloody thirst quenched in the
Watery graves
    Of delicate angels.

Well it's another poem in the same week, meaning that yes I am writing again. Thank you to someone who has really believed in my work and who has really pushed me into writing something (You know who you are ). This poem is sort of an experiment for me so tell me what you honestly think... can you follow that "floating down" bit? Anyway thanks for reading this

Andrew (Zu)

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1 posted 2001-12-24 08:15 PM


Andrew! awesome piece...i found it differ from your previous, obvisuoly eh? the experiment turned out wonderful...think you should do some more...first i was like staring at the "floating" part the...then i finally got it. woohoo!   lol...the poem is quite deep. i liked how you wrote it, great job and Thanks for sharing.

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2 posted 2001-12-24 09:51 PM


so much meaning in so few lines,
I love that kind of stuff.
Short and deep it makes you think.
I like that thanks for posting!

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3 posted 2001-12-24 10:57 PM


hey Zu, messin with my poor eyes with that floating trip LOL
I like this very much! well done, and Merry Christmas!

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4 posted 2001-12-24 11:34 PM


This was a wonderful piece zu!! Thanks for sharing!

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

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5 posted 2001-12-25 04:40 AM


Ooh! Ooh! *raises her hand..and then sits back down*

what did i tell you? see?..freeverse is easy...and when you know how to write it you can come up with wunnerful poems like this one right here! i love this one as much as i did the other one. i liked the floating down bit too- it added to the image of soft snow falling...very cute zu.
i love your darker more somber work...and this one does have a somber but beautiful feel to it- kinda like sitting in a magnificent cathedral.
loved it lots andy- looking forward to reading more- you know you have it in you.

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6 posted 2001-12-25 07:06 PM


Well thank you all for the replies, I wasn't sure about the "floating" thing but it is reassuring that you got it. This kind of writing is an experiment as mostly I can't help but ryhme. Thanks for all your replies and big thanx to Cherish for all her encouragement, support, nagging and the belief that I could write.

Andrew.

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7 posted 2001-12-26 12:43 PM


Wow... this is definitely what I've been missing!  This is absolutely beautiful.  Very well written.  I loved the use of HTML, that seems to just make the poem.  Very well done!
You have so much talent, Zu... you're one of the writers in the forum I really look up to!
Very nicely done.  I enjoyed this muchos!
Post more soon...

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