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Teen Poetry #5

Lonely Leprechaun On A Three Day Binge

Kaos
Member

since 2001-08-02

Posts 317
between space and time

0 posted 2001-12-24 12:33 PM

Losing
Only
Now
Even
Losing
You

Lowest
Epitome
Perhaps
Reality
Annihilated
Cold
Hearted
Adversaries
Under
Night skies

Ongoing
Notions

Avoided

Trodding
Heavily
Rejecting
Every
Emotion

Damned
And
Yellow

Bleeding
Inside
Now
Gone
Eternally

" How can i feel if i can't breathe...?"
-Godsmack
"If who i am is what i have, and what i have is lost...then who am i?"
-unknown

xShUgArHiGhx

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since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

1 posted 2001-12-24 10:47 AM

This one seemed to be different from the format you usually use. I thought it was a nice change and i like it a lot

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

Pixie-Babe03
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since 2000-08-29

Posts 387
Central Maine

2 posted 2001-12-24 08:28 PM

i liked this a lot, i am going to go find more of your poems

Voiceless
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since 2001-02-19

Posts 686
Under the stars upon the wind

3 posted 2001-12-24 09:55 PM

sweet set up.
Not to mention a great poem
to go with it.
Nicely done!

Freedom is not Free (Korean War memorial)

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

4 posted 2001-12-26 09:50 AM

Very different approach. The subject was interesting... I enjoyed this. The one-word lines worked very well. Nicely done

--Marie

If there's one thing I've learned, it's that the most frustrated people in the world are those who know they're stupid, but keep trying anyway.

anonymousfemale
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

5 posted 2001-12-27 11:41 PM

Hmm that's a different acrostic. I like it!!! The content of the piece itself is so dark it's quite enjoyable.

This would make a killer freeverse piece too.

Thanks for sharing it. Hope to see more soon.

~AF~

If this is all the world has to offer, I want a refund on my life.

punkrockerrobin

Senior Member

since 2001-05-15

Posts 1180
Sparks, NV

6 posted 2001-12-28 02:57 AM

i liked this poem a lot! great work!
robin

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