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Jenabou
Member

since 2000-06-13

Posts 215
Oklahoma/Nova Scotia Canada/USA

0 posted 2001-12-22 09:12 PM

Here and now...is this all we'll ever be?
My life is spinning downward.
out of control
And you know you mean everything to me
I feel my heart shatter every second we're apart
I know i should let go
    and i would let go
     if I could
But your name,it's engraved in my heart
and
       soul
it longs for you.like it knows something I don't
It screams out for you
        Every night
The stars and the moon shine down on me and
           You
walk through my heart as if orders from
         God
wove the threads of our being together
Your eyes are blind
and your mouth will never smile
until
you realize all you need you'll find
        inside of me
there is a fire
                 burning
for you
So Ian, won't you come warm your hands?
~Jenna-Nicole Boutilier~ 12/22/01

The world is like a mirror; frown at it, and it frowns at you. Smile and it smiles, too
Be kind,for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

1 posted 2001-12-23 12:39 PM

WOW! this had so much feeling in it i dont even know where to begin...amazing job and i think you expressed your feelings wonderfully in this!! I loved the last line..so romantic in a way but at the same time crying out for help...wonderful job!!

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

anonymousfemale
Member Elite

since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

2 posted 2001-12-23 09:29 AM

This is outstanding, Jenna. Amazing actually. Well, there are quite a few words to describe it so we'll leave it at a couple of them.

The staggered words worked well. It makes you slow down while reading it....at least for me anyway.

Thanks for sharing this. I really enjoyed it. Please remember to reply to others work also.

~AF~

If this is all the world has to offer, I want a refund on my life.

HopelessRomanticGuy
Member

since 2001-08-17

Posts 495
LI, New York

3 posted 2001-12-23 10:47 AM

Wow...so much emotion in this, don't know where to begin.. I love this format with the staggared words as well, it adds something to the poem. Extremely well written, thouroughly enjoyed.

Don't Drink and Park!
Accidents may cause People!

vixengrl04
Member

since 2001-04-26

Posts 495
East Haddam, CT

4 posted 2001-12-23 03:25 PM

Hey I REALLY liked this one!! You've succeeded in putting your emotions on paper, and you did a great job of it!! This was GREAT!!

~*Nikki*~

     *~Fighting for your love~*
    *~Is something I cannot do~*
   *~I'm not good enough to win~*
*~And I'm not strong enough to lose~*

Marshalzu

Member Elite

since 2001-02-15

Posts 2681
Lurking

5 posted 2001-12-23 04:46 PM

Thank you for sharing this great piece of work, I really enjoyed the read and feel that a lot of your emotions have gone into this peice, keep on posting this great work

Zu

"No army can conquer a galaxy, yet faith alone can overturn the universe"

Jenn Cirrincione

Member Elite

since 2000-07-02

Posts 2107
Fl

6 posted 2001-12-23 06:15 PM

Wow. I loved this one. So cute in the way it was expressed.
~ inside of me
there is a fire
burning
for you~

ahhh I know this well

Jenn

"I want love on my own terms; after everything I've ever learned. Me, I carry too much baggage..."

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