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hoppy
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since 2000-01-27
Posts 271


0 posted 2001-12-22 02:49 AM


Revenge
Dance with the harper
Strum us a cord
we want to see
blood from the sword
Sing with the voice
sqeal out a note
those days have ended
you slit his throat

Time with the shrink
this time you'll kill
it's over your head
you miss it still

Drink with the man
time i revoke
i poisoned your brain
they call it a stroke

I dance with the harper
struming you a cord
i got to see
your blood on my sword

---Written by:Hoppy


5-25-00  

i could be bounded in a nut shell and count myself king of infinite space

© Copyright 2001 Hoppy - All Rights Reserved
Jenabou
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since 2000-06-13
Posts 215
Oklahoma/Nova Scotia Canada/USA
1 posted 2001-12-22 07:44 PM


This poem was amazing
Tho it made my heart hurt.
You really got to bring out the emotions with this one.
I admire that

The world is like a mirror; frown at it, and it frowns at you. Smile and it smiles, too
Be kind,for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle

vixengrl04
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since 2001-04-26
Posts 495
East Haddam, CT
2 posted 2001-12-22 07:57 PM


This was somewhat scary and morbid, but you wrote it quite well.  

~*Nikki*~

     *~Fighting for your love~*
    *~Is something I cannot do~*
   *~I'm not good enough to win~*
*~And I'm not strong enough to lose~*

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since 2000-09-26
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tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs
3 posted 2001-12-23 01:00 AM


I like this one!! Has a lotta feeling in it nice job!!

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

TopGunLauren
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since 2000-08-02
Posts 718
California
4 posted 2001-12-23 02:52 AM


Yeah I really love this even if it's scary or morbid.Keep up the awsome work.
  Lauren

"I just needed someone to talk to you were just to busy with yourself."-Staind


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