A woman now (please read comments are soo needed) :) It's a happy poem..I think:Ãž

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Ceinwyn
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since 2000-07-09

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0 posted 2001-12-21 03:13 PM

Yesterday was my bday..but my age is undisclosed =Ãž I'll give you a hint it's more than you think..lol..but you can email me with your guesses if you like j/k..don't be surprised it really isn't going to rhyme...

Today I am a woman
Wise in so many little ways
A naive soul
A beatiful heart
And dreams full of memories
I remember waking up
Rushing out that door to go to school
Now I rush out that door
For another paycheck
And to make this month's rent
Another birthday
Another year, that I'm forever thankful
To have friends and family near
It's not about the presents
Not about the cake
It's about the sacrifices
And the choices I have to make
And not about what other people think
Life is too short
To second guess
And always try to perfect
For another human being
Who is trying to take control
And it wasn't when I blew out those candles
Or when the clock struck 3:45 in the morning
When I became a woman
It's when I started to let go of the the negativity
And restraints upon my heart
And finally realized life isn't so bad
Is when I truly became a woman...

[This message has been edited by Ceinwyn (12-21-2001 03:23 PM).]

Alyssa

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since 2001-05-30

Posts 385
IM ENGAGED!!!!!

1 posted 2001-12-21 03:49 PM

Oh wow this is nice, i really enjoyed this piece alot, i dunno your age though but im assuming old enuff to be on your own...lol
Nice piece!

....Handle with care...

PoetryIsLife

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since 2001-10-27

Posts 1763
...in my boxers...

2 posted 2001-12-21 05:22 PM

21? I don't know, that's just my fav # and age

About the poem, lvoed it! It was more mature and deep then most I see here, and it was very, very clearly written. I loved it! Definetly a library.

One though, well, two, actually. *impish grin* This line stumbled me: And always try to perfect. And, I'd take of the 'is' off the last line, maybe? That messed me up. Ho ho ho! Looking forward to mroe from you.

Sincerely,
Titus

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

3 posted 2001-12-22 02:37 AM

and about the age...18 would still be in college...hmm. um, letme think...*thinks* 50! just kidding?

The poem itself as titled was VERY mature and deep as ti-said. i agree on that...it had lot of experiences and things you learned written out quite nicely.

Hey...#25437
What!
You in there?
Yea, im in here.
ok

[This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (12-22-2001 02:40 AM).]

Shygirl82
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since 2001-02-19

Posts 245
Ilinois

4 posted 2001-12-22 02:42 AM

I liked this one alot...I found that I could relate to it. It was very well writtend...
now for your age...hmmm I am going to guess 22 or 23?

Smile!! You never know who may be falling in love with it...

Jenn Cirrincione

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since 2000-07-02

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5 posted 2001-12-22 03:23 AM

DEC 21? You and I share a birthday

Great work here.

Lemme guess...hmmm...23?

Jenn

"I want love on my own terms; after everything I've ever learned. Me, I carry too much baggage..."

vixengrl04
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since 2001-04-26

Posts 495
East Haddam, CT

6 posted 2001-12-22 07:56 PM

I'm so glad to read motivational pieces like this one!! It was very well-written and it seems like you've recognized some very important things in life. Happy Birthday, and congrats on "becoming a woman"!! As for the age my guess is 23..

~*Nikki*~

     *~Fighting for your love~*
    *~Is something I cannot do~*
   *~I'm not good enough to win~*
*~And I'm not strong enough to lose~*

Jenabou
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since 2000-06-13

Posts 215
Oklahoma/Nova Scotia Canada/USA

7 posted 2001-12-22 08:02 PM

I really liked this
its so true you can never grow if you're holding on to the past and negativity

The world is like a mirror; frown at it, and it frowns at you. Smile and it smiles, too
Be kind,for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle

anonymousfemale
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since 2000-02-02

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Limbo

8 posted 2001-12-23 09:03 AM

68!!!

Nice write here. I liked what it represented. Realising you're your own individual and embracing the idea of being mature instead of wallowing in the emptiness of it is a wonderful experience.

Thanks for sharing. Please remember to reply to others work also.

~AF~

If this is all the world has to offer, I want a refund on my life.

HopelessRomanticGuy
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since 2001-08-17

Posts 495
LI, New York

9 posted 2001-12-23 10:57 AM

Great poem, rhyming dosen't matter that much in this one. It flowed fine despite that. The negative things of the past can hinder your growth, so I'm glad you released it all; life really isn't that bad. But my typing skills are. ::sigh::

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