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Kaos
Member

since 2001-08-02

Posts 317
between space and time

0 posted 2001-12-19 11:32 AM

I’m trapped, in a sea of weightless rubbage,
In a place where all reality ceases to exist.
Gravity fades as your limbs go numb,
Colors bleed and swirl together into a whirlpool of greens and reds and blues,
And as they swirl faster    just black.
Repulsive black, surrounds me filling my lungs and invading my mind,
But I reject it      it’s angry.
Enraged at my nerve to expel it    forced from it’s host… vile parasite,
Free     blackness fading        slowly     downed…
And awaken to a world that’s dead within itself.

" How can i feel if i can't breathe...?"
- Godsmack

"If who i am is what i have, and what i have is lost...then who am i?"
-unknown

LoneWolf
Member

since 2001-03-10

Posts 384
IL

1 posted 2001-12-19 02:53 PM

I liked this, good job here.

It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that.
I've learned that even when you th

Marshalzu

Member Elite

since 2001-02-15

Posts 2681
Lurking

2 posted 2001-12-21 06:45 AM

Wow, I really liked this, it was difficult to read but I enjoyed it loads, thank you for sharing this, keep on posting the great work.

Zu

"No army can conquer a galaxy, yet faith alone can overturn the universe"

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

3 posted 2001-12-26 11:13 AM

You show a lot of pain withi you
I just hope you find happiness
thanks for sharing

là où est mon amour?
donde está mi amour?
wo ist meine Liebe?
Nelly Furtado é a menina a mais bonita no mundo largo do todo.

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

4 posted 2001-12-26 01:42 PM

"Gravity fades as your limbs go numb,
Colors bleed and swirl together into a whirlpool of greens and reds and blues,
And as they swirl faster just black."

You portray very deep emotions in this piece. I hope all is okay... You expressed beautiful images in the poem, and the emphasis on the colors was wonderful. Nicely done.

--Marie

If there's one thing I've learned, it's that the most frustrated people in the world are those who know they're stupid, but keep trying anyway.

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