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knightlyshadows
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obscured vision

0 posted 2001-12-17 01:15 AM


At times I cannot see,
                        with my world so dark and grim
My doubts rise to the surface,
                        shadows dance upon my mind
Thoughts roll through my head,
                        deepening my abyss of self worth
Knowledge comes and goes on its on,
                         blocking the truth from my eyes


“A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.”

I know Im not perfect but I can smile
& I hope that you c this heart behind my tired eyes

[This message has been edited by knightlyshadows (edited 12-17-2001).]

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1 posted 2001-12-17 06:23 PM


So knowledge blocks the truth from your eyes...interesting thought, hun. I'm afraid I understand this one...
Looove you  
  ~Carly

Speak softly and carry a beagle.

"Go outside and use your own eyes. You'll be surprised to see things you've never been taught."
   ~Edouard Manet

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2 posted 2001-12-18 05:33 PM


hmmmm interesting

....Handle with care...

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3 posted 2001-12-21 01:52 PM


Then unblock it
Do something about it
it's all up to you
Whatever bad we feel, it's us allowing it to our lives
Fight back and do something to make you happy again
thanks for the read

là où est mon amour?
donde está mi amour?
wo ist meine Liebe?
Nelly Furtado é a menina a mais bonita no mundo largo do todo.


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4 posted 2001-12-24 07:20 PM


Whoa...i really liked how this one felt while reading...

the italic alone can be a poem of itself and i though you intended to do that so...i read the standard alone but its did work out like that...hehe.

think you did a great job...i enjoyed it and its nice having you around here at the forums, Tiff.

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What!
You in there?
Yea, im in here.
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5 posted 2001-12-24 10:16 PM


Short and thought provoking
my favorite kind!
This is so neat I had to read it twice
to decide what i liked most of it.
I came to this conclusion i like it all.

Freedom is not Free (Korean War memorial)

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6 posted 2001-12-24 11:41 PM


Great job on this knightly! Good read

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

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7 posted 2001-12-26 10:01 AM


I really like this one, Tiff! You wrote this very well, and the staggered lines is easy on the eyes. Very nice work... I enjoyed it so much. Post some more soon, eh? *hugs* Miss you.

--Marie

If there's one thing I've learned, it's that the most frustrated people in the world are those who know they're stupid, but keep trying anyway.

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8 posted 2001-12-26 01:13 PM


very nice write, i enjoyed reading it!
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